The Masks

Four masks interlocked in dreadful stare

Observation changing all before

Entangled weave of gazes entwined

To make all, that once was not,

Now there


Four masks caged in pained haunt

To build, To burn, To act, To plan

A raging storm with no end or halt

The vortex spiral of dreamland


Four masks making haste to plan all fate

Fighting for a secure place in the abyss

Longing to fill a thirst they cannot sate

Creating chaos in darkened mist

Wednesday, March 24, 2010

Latest Asimov/Syrka

Siren arrived at the hotel Yorba with Syrka in tow. She did her job but this time she felt little consolation in the idea of her next upgrade. What Peyton, Feinburg, and Strassman would do to an Etherian captive she dared not think about, she cringed at the possibilities. Feinburg was there to greet their arrival.

"Awe Siren. You were successful yet again. Peyton will be more then pleased. Come let us talk."

"I am not sure you want my opinion right now Dr. Feinburg. I do not condone this course of action. Better we kill him now then subject him to whatever you may have in mind."

"Do you really think us so barbarous Siren? We will treat him with the respect the few remaining Etherians deserve. That is to say we have no plans to torture or otherwise hurt this one unless he should choose not to cooperate."

"I assure you. Feinburg is it? That I have every intention to cooperate. I know what will be asked of me and it has been ordained that I acquiesce."

"Interesting...We were not expecting this. It will be curious to see how Peyton reacts, she was already prepared to interrogate."

"Whatever happened to not being barbarous Doctor."

"I never said we weren't, I said 'do you really think us to be.'"

"I knew this was a mistake. The price I pay to pave my body with robotics." She looked on Syrka with pity.

A short while later they arrived at Peyton's office deep within the underground structure of the hotel.

"Greetings Etherian, I hate to bring you here under these circumstances but we require your assistance in opening this vault."

"And I have every intention of giving my assistance Asimov."

"What? Asimov? You mistake me for someone else sir. I am Peyton Sorenson."

"I would know you anywhere as the electrical apparition you are, the Asimov."

"Clear the room." Siren, Strassman, and Feinburg stood around seemingly confused. "Clear the room now! Everyone but Syrka leave immediately." They all turned more confused then ever but nevertheless did as instructed.

"What do you know of Asimov?"

"I know what there is to know. I created you, I think I would know my own creation."

"Created me?"

"Yes. I created Asimov, a thinking computer program, a sentient self-aware thinking computer program."

"I...I don't understand, to what purpose. The driving force of my existence has been to transcend these trappings. To become what you would call a soul, are you responsible for this...this drive?"

Monday, March 22, 2010

Latest Iboga Confrontation

"Firstly since my presence is no longer a secret we must find a way for me to communicate with the others. If we are to catch Iboga we will need the help of the other Etherians." Axis spoke internally to Graven once more. "We simply need a rock with this rune scribed into it." Axis gave Graven a mental image of the rune.

A couple hours later it was done and Graven called forth a meeting.

"I have an introduction to make this evening under these somber of circumstances. After Veyn's funeral we will begin a search of the forest. This search will be for the wraith of Iboga himself. We cannot allow his restless spirit to haunt here in this, the city of Axium. To this end I want you all to meet Axis." Graven pulled the rock from his pocket and placed it on the table and traced the rune on it's surface. Moment's later the rune alit and became three dimensional above the rock. It floated there and as Axis began to speak it pulsed with each deep, echoed word."

"Friends you don't know me, but I know you all very well. As well as Graven knows you, perhaps better. Graven has kept me a secret for a long time now at my request but the time for subtlety has passed."

"I don't understand...What...What are you?"

"I am a fragment from the chain of Fracture and normally I would be happy to indulge you with a history of the universe explanation but for now let's just say I am a close friend of Graven. Heed notice to his metallic eye. That is the nature of my existence and under normal circumstances I would converse with no other, but alas things have changed. Iboga's spirit has been set free, his blue cobalt ether embodied by his attainment of myself before his death, and mind you that one's mind is no picnic. I was there briefly and in that time I assimilated all the knowledge that was Iboga."

"You mean to say you have access to the memories of a 1300 year old Etherian?" Syrka queried.

"All of them. From his morning routine to his research and obsession with becoming a spirit. It seems Iboga had pupose in his actions this day."

"His purpose was to reap havoc and exert control, the same as it always was with Iboga," said Adahn from experience.

"His reason for coming extends beyond that Adahn. Apparenly Iboga plans to inhabit a golem."

"A golem?" Graven prodded.

"It's a machine of sorts. A bipedal machine made of iron and empowered by runic symbols."

"I thought spirits were unable to affect the living." Syrka assumed.

"Normally that is the case but Iboga has found a way through runes to inhabit the body of this 'golem'."

"To what end?" Adahn inquired.

"Iboga knows of the Gaiasphere and the tree is a haven for souls. He also knew that he would be denied entrance to the tree. He constructed the golem for the sole purpose of forcing entrance into the Gaiasphere. I cannot tell you the effect that a malignant soul would have on the paradise of the sphere."
"I thought the sphere was impenetrable, what is the danger?" Graven was genuinely concerned.

"Iboga's golem possesses an intricate rune which simulates the ether strain of Gaia and her daughter laced into a drill. This ether drill can penetrate the surface of even the gaiasphere, then it's a simple matter of evacuating the host golem and becoming a part of the tree. Once part of the tree Iboga will corrupt every intricacy of the tree's wonder."

"We can't let that happen! I won't let it," exclaimed Graven.

"The answer to defeating Iboga's plan is the wax used by the Eoti. It is the only known substance which is affected by the soul's transferrance. If we can trap the golem in the wax it will be enough to stop the soul from entering the sphere."

"How will we find enough wax in time. The bees are hard to locate." Syrka was very familiar already with the intricacies of the wax.

"We have just over two weeks. The machine is located back in the ruins of Ahmphyrr. It will take his soul time to reach it, as well as the machine's journey back to Axium. Plus I know of a method to dilute the wax so that large quantities of the substance can still be made effective at lower consistencies."

Tuesday, March 16, 2010

Siren captures Syrka

Siren tracked the hooded figure by beacon to an installation in the mountains. Her body was still sore from the implantations; finger dexterity, arm movement, leg movement, and finally a neural interface that allowed her to hack into computers even at range. Siren was on her way to becoming more robotic then biotic, which was fine by her account.

Witnessing her parents death at a young age at the hands of a robotic assassin, Siren had since hated her human side, her weakness as she had stated it. In her mind machines were faster, stronger, more efficient, objective, and ruthless. These were all the qualities that she admired. So it was with each new upgrade she came closer to her goal, replacing her weakness with strength, her liabilities with assets.

Drawing closer to her newest target Siren felt more confident and able then ever. Her every movement seemed guided and enhanced by the upgrades. She wasn't sure about abducting another human being for there was no telling what Feinburg and Peyton would do to a live capture, knowing their propensity for experimentation. Even Siren, ruthless though she may be, did not wish that on anyone.

She was on route to her destination beacon by means of stealth outfitted harrier jet. It wasn't long before she reached the location, a mountain in the middle of a vast range only accessible by air from first look. It was nighttime and so she landed the harrier jet on a plateau overlooking the what seemed to be the entrance to the mountain base. She dawned her mirage suit, exited the jet, and began to scale the distance down to the door.

When she arrived she saw a simple metallic door with the emblem of a candle over a book. In addition to this were other runes similar to the ones of the vault they had attempted to open before. Siren remembered back to the incident at the lab and sighed. She knew there was no way for her to open the door herself, and so she waited just upon a ledge over the entrance. Siren was not a patient person and the hours wore upon her patience like none other, yet still she waited for what seemed like more then a day and a half before the door opened itself. She flicked her wrist to activate the suit and jumped off the ledge kicking the figure in the face. He went tumbling down and as he did Siren planted a sleeping dart into his neck from her tranq pistol. The figure was not Etherian but human and so she entered the complex and resumed her search for the vault-master.

Siren walked nonchalantly and silently through the halls of the Eoti complex. As she walked she observed windowed walls surrounding rooms filled with glass framed prints of some type she did not recognize. The complex seemed circular with rooms jetting outward and inward from the main circle with 1 particular pathway leading to a large room in the center.

Cautiously she turned down toward the large room to notice two guards stationed at what appeared to be an elevator and several others toiling about some unbeknown yet meticulous task. In the center of the room was a large sentry gun. Siren figured that at her best she could not overcome all the obstacles before her unless...

She blinked three times sequenctially and a small interface appeared within her frame of vision. She targetted the sentry gun and tapped into it's hierchy of commands. Almost through the sentry guns' internal defense systems she encountered a password of six letters. After much trial and error she narrowed it down down to six letters which made no sense to her. She entered them anyway,
T-h-e-I-N-D. She gained access to the inner control systems of the gun, changed it's targetting commands, and activated. The scene before her was a ballet of violence and blood. The gun decimated the guards sending the others running for their lives for Siren had set it to only shoot armed targets.

She entered the elevator and hit the only button, 'down.' It continued descending for some time before finally the door opened, Siren checked her suit to make sure she was still undetectable. Finally the door opened to reveal a massive room populated by more and more glass framed prints. They seemed to go on forever and in each cardinal direction from the elevator.

Friday, March 12, 2010

Chapter 9 conclusion and 10 Ideas

When Siren arrived back at the hotel Peyton was already testing the vault for weaknesses with Dr. Feinburg. Peyton had already decided in advance that the vault would not crack under usual methods and was going to require a special device.

In the lab a large gun type device hung from a rail atop the chamber. Peyton hit a button and the gun slid along the rail into place. The particle beam relied on a particle accelerator to stream subatomic particles at near light speed to generate vast amounts of kinetic energy and thus heat, burning through the walls of the vault. The device was aimed through the use of three magnets which directed the stream through a lens which focused the beam.

"Do you really think this is necessary Peyton," asked Dr. Feinburg.

"The vault will not be penetrated by any other means, I am most sure of that fact," Peyton said assuredly.

Siren walked into the room a moment later, in the midst of the preparations to activate the device.

"Siren your timing is most fortuitous. Please step behind the observation wall and witness the cannon in action," cautioned Dr. Feinburg.

"Canon? You can't be serious. The vault is over 2000 years old. We could blow the dust away and the thing would cease to exist," said Siren quite sarcasticly.

"There are far more intricate powers at work in the safe then you are aware of Siren. These runes have hardened the stone beyond any properties we are prepared to face, it will be luck alone that grants us access." Peyton seemed quite certain of this.

Siren stepped behind the observation wall and Peyton fired the cannon. The beam focused upon the vault with intensity for a solid minute, then something finally began to show effect. Unfortunately it was not the beam that had become effective. A rune manifested itself before the beam, splitting it and redirecting it through the lab. The beam instantaneously began to wreck the room. In mere seconds the entirety of the lab was destroyed as if the sun itself had rolled within it. Ultimately the beam was redirected upon itself, destroying billions in research and material. This all happened in mere moments before Feinburg or Peyton could shut down the device.

"It appears you may have been right about the safe Peyton. I acquiesce defeat in this particular battle of wits. Luck was not with us," quipped Siren.

"My...my...my lab! What have you done! All my work is destroyed, all my ingredients are disintegrated."

"Calm yourself doctor the company will recover your losses without question. Your laboratory will be rebuilt and restored beyond your ability to imagine," Peyton replied nonchalantly to Feinburg's ecstatic rambling.

"But my work! It's all gone! It was irreplaceable."

"The backup systems are in place if you would recall Feinburg. Stop your inane muttering." It was obvious that the patience of Peyton had worn thin long ago, her every move being thwarted by Graven in the past and now the Eoti had singed his last nerve. "The vault-master is the answer. I must have him immediately. Siren!"

"Yes Peyton? How can I help you this fine evening?"

"You are to apprehend the keeper of this vault posthaste," an angered Peyton replied.

"Wait a moment there Peyton, kidnapping is not part of the deal. I will steal for you, I will play messenger girl, and on occasion I will take the life of those who stand in my way. I will not play party to kidnapping. A girl must have principles."

"You will kidnap him or your upgrades will cease to exist and you will remain a pathetic and weak human for the entirety of your short lived stay here on this planet."

"But Peyton surely have I served you well. The last couple of assignments have gone consummately. I am becoming a more effective employee with each upgrade, surely you can see that."

"Feinburg prep Siren for surgery and install the two upgrades she is owed in addition to another."

"Very well Peyton, I will do as you ask," said Siren in resignation.

Somehow Peyton always got her way.

* * * * * *

Iboga was a patient Etherian. It had been over 40 years since his defeat at Ahmphyrr and the time had finally come to reap vengeance upon those who both abandoned and betrayed him. He arrived at the festival shortly after twilight on the third day. The aftereffects of Hauntlore still blurring the vision of the people of Axium with psychadelic vibrance.

Iboga levitated through the city on invisible wings. He had almost reached the Gaiasphere, the home of Graven before he finally confronted Veyn and three of the guards.

"Iboga...I know not why you come or how you have survived but you may go no further. No stranger shall approach the tree." Veyn spoke with indignation at the intruder, the one distracting him from his busy day of policing the city.

"Veyn...ah yes the babysitter. I have observed you all these many years, no one here is capable of stopping me. Not that witch Gaia long since dead, and not Graven the keeper of the Fragment that should long ago been mine."

"You will not speak of Gaia that way and Graven will come to no harm by you, that I can assure. Step down and no harm will come to you"

The three guards trained their bows on Iboga, timidly awaiting his response. Two of them had been from the original village of Ahmphyrr and remembered Iboga all too well.

"Harm you say? Well I wouldn't want to come to any harm now would I?" Iboga seemed amused.

With a flick of his wrist he set two of the guards on fire. The screaming and burning flesh caused the third guard to run for his life. Veyn alone fired his bow in time striking Iboga in the right shoulder.

"Arrows? Arrows! You think wood will stop me this time!" Without a word Iboga shattered the arrow embedded in his shoulder and turned the splinters toward Veyn. He set them loose. The splinters riddled Veyns body with deep lesions throwing him to the ground. "Now young Veyn where is Graven.

"Do your worst, I would never give you Graven much less my cooperation." Veyn took his spear and began to throw it from his grounded position. The spear shattered into a thousand pieces, the metal tip driving into Veyn's skull. He fell over lifeless.

The guard who ran returned with Graven at his side before taking flight once more.

"Veyn! Nooo! What have you done? Iboga you will pay for this travesty."

"It is you who will pay Graven for the limp in my leg and my wasted time procurring the eye."

Graven manifested a crystalline shield coated in ice, remembering Iboga's tricks with fire. This time however Iboga went with water. Moisture condensed and beaded upon Graven before forming into droplets, then into a body of water that began to encircle Graven. Suddenly the wave overcame him and he found he could not breath, the water begging to coarse through his lungs. A storm began to form overhead and Iboga's will was set to be done.

As Graven began to drown a rune suddenly entered his thoughts, the rune of life. Graven called to it, asking..begging for it's assistance. Vines came from the ground and made to entangle Iboga breaking his concentration. The water surrounding Graven subsided, and dripping wet he could do little more then catch his breath. Iboga laid a hand upon the vine and electricity coarsed through the plant, shocking him as well but breaking the plants grip. Iboga laid upon the ground across from Graven. Both were stunned and on the verge of collapse. That was when Iboga in a desperate attempt to get the eye froze the still wet Graven solid.

Iboga let out a halfhearted laugh as he crawled toward Graven.
"Now after all these years the eye will be mine. The power of the cosmos squandered by your petty life will become one with my being."

Iboga grabbed Graven's leg and helped himself up, his old injury from their first battle biting at his leg as he arose. Graven could do nothing. Frozen helpless he watched as Iboga grabbed the eye and ripped it from his skull.

"At last! It's mine!"

Iboga wasted no time embedding the eye in his skull. The burning eye seared into his head and he screamed with mad glee and pain. The ether in his veins turned blue in that moment and in that very second Kalyx approached him from behind spear in hand and plunged it into his heart. Iboga fell over dead without a pause.







































Chapter 10

Graven looked into the eyes of his daughter who had just been forced to kill someone for the first time in her life, at his expense.

"Graven, Graven are you alright." Kalyx slid her hand down the frozen face of Graven, with his missing eye.

Graven did the best he could to blink his eyes despite his frozen state to no avail, though she could see his eyes darting back and forth beneath the sheet. The city still had not been made aware of the attack, such was the consequences of the festival. Kalyx gathered a torch and set to work defrosting Graven, starting with his head. At a distance she guided the torch along the ice, melting it gradually so as to not burn him stuck within. Moments later he could speak.

"Kalyx...I don't know what to say. You saved my life.






Siren tracked the hooded figure by beacon to an installation in the mountains. Her body was still sore from the implantations; finger dexterity, arm movement, leg movement, and finally a neural interface that allowed her to hack into computers even at range. Siren was on her way to becoming more robotic then biotic, which was fine by her account.

Witnessing her parents death at a young age at the hands of a robotic assassin, Siren had since hated her human side, her weakness as she had stated it. In her mind machines were faster, stronger, more efficient, objective, and ruthless. These were all the qualities that she admired. So it was with each new upgrade she came closer to her goal, replacing her weakness with strength, her liabilities with assets.

Drawing closer to her newest target Siren felt more confident and able then ever. Her every movement seemed guided and enhanced by the upgrades. She wasn't sure about abducting another human being for there was no telling what Feinburg and Peyton would do to a live capture, knowing their propensity for experimentation. Even Siren, ruthless though she may be, did not wish that on anyone.

Wednesday, March 10, 2010

convo 3.10.10 with jason

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forrestjones2010
1 2 3 and to tha fo
snoop doggy dog and dr dre' is at tha doe
cagedmind0531
lol
So we gotta do something with chapter 9
forrestjones2010
straight to it huh
cagedmind0531
It's been bugging me all weekend
forrestjones2010
lets role
where are we
cagedmind0531
Siren just robbed an armored car and graven and the Eoti just got started
Kalyx and her dad need to get to know each other somehow
forrestjones2010
robbed an armored car to obtain what item?
cagedmind0531
The vault with the candle in it and the other Eoti stuff
forrestjones2010
oh right
cagedmind0531
They may or may not have kidnapped Syrka. I haven't written it yet
We were discussing coral dying and leaving behind a deathprint that means something or does something possibly
We decided what I wrote for chapter 9 was pretty dry
forrestjones2010
k
thinking
i think there are to many people in the mix for clear focus
knock some out
cagedmind0531
Like who and how?
forrestjones2010
who do you feel most passionate about
at the moment
siren or g and kaylx
or syrka and kaylx
oops
syrka and Eoti?
cagedmind0531
I guess that would be incorporating the Eoti somehow into the death of Coral and kalyx and graven having some kind of relationship
forrestjones2010
break the chapter into 3 parts
cagedmind0531
Oh sidenote
My friend printed out the book and he said he is getting his red pen out for tonight
forrestjones2010
third third third
k
good
cagedmind0531
First person I have had print it out
forrestjones2010
thats good
i have givien out 2 hard copies
15 soft copies
no feed back
cagedmind0531
You gave them hard copies and they still didn't read it?
forrestjones2010
yes
cagedmind0531
That's fucking lame
forrestjones2010
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canan is here with me
sorry
cagedmind0531
np
So we could start the chapter with Coral was dying.
why is she dying
If she is dying anyway. That isn't written in stone
forrestjones2010
she has fulfilled her purpose
ushering in the goddess
cagedmind0531
Ok that's the reason I imagined as well
Before she passes she warns that Iboga isn't dead, and he won't stop till he has the eye.
Iboga will attack during the last day of the festival and will nearly kill Graven, but Graven delivers the deathblow to Iboga as he finally gets the eye
His purpose fulfilled Iboga turns into a malevolent spirit
He's denied entry by the Gaia tree as a soul
forrestjones2010
k
nice
cagedmind0531
My friend is already criticizing the first page. This is great
Ok so what may be difficult to fill in is the the time leading up to the festival, when does Coral die. What does her deathprint say.
forrestjones2010
thinking
cagedmind0531
I was thinking it could show Iboga as a wraith, killing someone or something
forrestjones2010
uh uh
keep going
more fundamental than that
cagedmind0531
What do you mean?
forrestjones2010
something that speaks to how the unirese is tied together or an age shift
something large
arent we shifting right now?
cagedmind0531
If we can but I don't think we should force anything. Iboga having a soul is a pretty big shift
But then again it doesn't move the overall arc
It just kills time
forrestjones2010
what are two words that mean X and Y
we are moving from what to wht gain?
from what to what again
cagedmind0531
I don't know, but alluding to the scalping several thousand years before it happens may be odd. Or...maybe if the deathprint alludes to it and the eoti create a chronical of the scalping or something
forrestjones2010
thats not what i meant
what age are we shifting from ether to spirit
?
cagedmind0531
yes
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
There? The net went out
forrestjones2010
just woke
cagedmind0531
You nap or something?
forrestjones2010
yep
im up now
cagedmind0531
I napped too lol
forrestjones2010
ahhhh
we lazy
lol
cagedmind0531

forrestjones2010
wrtin is hard work i tell ya
cagedmind0531
ok so where were we before we nodded off
What does her deathprint say
forrestjones2010
Corals deathprint
cagedmind0531
aye
odd this is giving us so much trouble
forrestjones2010
give me a little bit i need to make a phone call
cagedmind0531
ok sir
forrestjones2010
its not really that difficult
i just have a ton going on around me
give me a sec
cagedmind0531
k
forrestjones2010
be back later unexpected guests
sup
http://www.nbcdfw.com/around-town/events/Flaming-Lips-to-Play-Dentons-NX35-Fest-79671807.html
cagedmind0531
I'm here what's kickin
forrestjones2010
not a lot getting ready for a meeting
cagedmind0531
I am selling my soul and getting a gym membership
forrestjones2010
say it aint so
cagedmind0531
I really need one...but 2 years is such a frickin long contract
forrestjones2010
dont do a contract
gross icky
cagedmind0531
I can't afford to get it without one
forrestjones2010
f those hookers
cagedmind0531
it's 20 dollars more a month for 1 year
and even more then that for monthly
forrestjones2010
douche baggery
cagedmind0531
But I'm so fat and lazy...
forrestjones2010
fancy patz gangstars
pants
cagedmind0531
Sigh. This is making me a nervous wreck.
forrestjones2010
beth put you up to it?
cagedmind0531
No. I want to do it for me.
forrestjones2010
wow...i have a membership
dont use it enough
cagedmind0531
Yeah that's my main concern...
forrestjones2010
it happens
cagedmind0531
24 a month isn't that bad but the upfront fee sucks
forrestjones2010
what is the up front?
cagedmind0531
100 plus first and last month
forrestjones2010
148
yeah thats steep
whore birds
cagedmind0531
They have a pool though and it's really important to my brother
forrestjones2010
have you seen a preview to the legend of the guardians?
cagedmind0531
Yeah it looks cool
forrestjones2010
it freaked me out at first
i saw bird
i saw mask
and i saw trees
cagedmind0531
rofl
forrestjones2010
i said noooooooooooooooooo
the bastardsssssssssss
cagedmind0531
rofl
forrestjones2010
the horrorrrrrrr
cagedmind0531
Those were not masks though
They were helmets
forrestjones2010
well then i am of
thnks
whew
(wipes sweat off brow)
(speaks pig latin under breath)
cagedmind0531
lol
forrestjones2010
(writes something on big chief tablet with red crayola)
cagedmind0531
lol
So I wrote 3 ish pages yesterday
Where were you punk?
forrestjones2010
i got on around 230
cagedmind0531
Yeah I was already asleep. That's 3:30 here
It's not a big deal. Just let me know. You had told me 10ish
forrestjones2010
yeah well home life is not so charming at the moment
cagedmind0531
I'm sorry man. You and Tish still fighting?
We don't have to talk about it but it might make you feel better.
forrestjones2010
i am sick of talking about it
time to move on
cagedmind0531
Move on? You mean as in divorce?
Or just done talking about the argument?
forrestjones2010
no i mean move the conversation on to something brighter
i have to leave in a few minutes
meeting at 5 and i have to drive there
cagedmind0531
Oh well in regards to what I wrote. I hope it's not dry. I rewrote chapter 9
I'm sorry I was prying by the way man. I'm just worried about you.
forrestjones2010
no you are fine
i am an open book to you anythime jason
cagedmind0531
You have alot of meetings at this job
Do they actually solve anything?
forrestjones2010
all day long homey i am in high demand...everybody wants to see jonsey
cagedmind0531
ha
Maybe you can be my financial advisor. What do I do with my money Forrest!
rofl
forrestjones2010
i have a new reader in dallas btw
cagedmind0531
Cool
forrestjones2010
will you email me just chapter 1?
cagedmind0531
Just chapter 1?
forrestjones2010
hey from now on just send people one chapter at a time until they let you know the y have read it
yes just one
cagedmind0531
Sent
forrestjones2010
ty
gotta go
cagedmind0531
laters
forrestjones2010
mornings
cagedmind0531
morning
My reader is pulling through
forrestjones2010
nice
good input then i take it
cagedmind0531
He's started on chapter 1 today and he's giving me some criticism
One. He wishes he knew the main character a bit better, but he's just starting.
forrestjones2010
good
cagedmind0531
Two. I used the speaking in unison too many times but he liked it actually. I just need to remove once or twice
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
Three he thinks Graven would be going more nuts then he did if the thing hit his eye
Mostly typing these now so I remember them
forrestjones2010
perhaps
np
cagedmind0531
So I have a bit for chapter 3 and I wrote in Siren's robbery of the armored car.
forrestjones2010
nice
cagedmind0531
Posted under Siren's Robbery and Chapter 9 start on the rough draft site
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
edit as ya go?
forrestjones2010
will explain
emily: rocktease@gmail.com
or fb if itll let the message go long enough
either or
gmail i suppose is the easiest
whatever is easiest for you
i just needed to grab that of of gmail IM for a sec
she is another reader in dallas
i read her stuff sometimes
cagedmind0531
So she is obligated? mwhahaha
forrestjones2010
she is a friend of Blinky's
indeed
cagedmind0531
The robbery came more naturally then when I first tried to write it this time.
Also Chapter 9 should be alot better then last time. I put in some drugs and sex
forrestjones2010
drugs and sex make everything nice
cagedmind0531
apparently
forrestjones2010
ok ch1 sent to emily scopas
i think by sendin ch 1 less of a task is presented
cagedmind0531
Well I have another reader who is an electrical engineer but he is like on 12 hr shifts for 2 weeks and has 2 kids
forrestjones2010
and if people just aren't readers we will know not to send more so we wonr waste our time sending more
cagedmind0531
So he'll be a few weeks
aye
forrestjones2010
taking chances on our good content floating around un hyperspace with no condom on
as of yet anyway
cagedmind0531
haha yeah
forrestjones2010
ok i am going to pull up site and read now
cagedmind0531
k
forrestjones2010
its the freshesh entry?
cagedmind0531
yes
By the way feel free to promise mention in the book for readers
As in...special thanks to etc etc
forrestjones2010
sure
cagedmind0531
I'm ready to edit soon as ya throw things my way
forrestjones2010
k
Very gently and silently the invisible Siren dropped
Gentle and silent an invisible Siren
truck.
her suit diverting the light and thus concealing her movements.
Her suit diverted the light and conceald her movement.
cagedmind0531
done, done, done
forrestjones2010
or Her suit diverted the light concealing her movement.
a cold lifeless friendship
a cold lifeless friendship
cagedmind0531
?
forrestjones2010
attatchement too
or stronger word than friendship
cagedmind0531
Yeah that was kind of an oxymoron anyway
forrestjones2010
she became an extension of each lieless alloy she daunted
just a thought
cagedmind0531
Anything electronic she felt a kindredship with, a cold lifeless attachment. She became an extension of each lifeless alloy she plied.
forrestjones2010
nice
cagedmind0531
lifeless was used twice. I'll fix that
forrestjones2010
you my friend are a lexophile
devoid of life
cagedmind0531
each dead alloy
that work?
forrestjones2010
yes
cagedmind0531
inane is better
forrestjones2010
the trigger apparently being a soft whisper in the sound proof armored room, the soft whisper from the air passing by from the hole Siren drilled.
yes
the trigger was a soft whisper
cagedmind0531
fixed
It was semi difficult to make this so elaborate and interesting.
forrestjones2010
A laser materialized out of thin air, the tool itself as well as Siren concealed by the attributes of her suit. The gun did not activate. It was obvious that so long as she cut beneath the keyboard her movements would go undetected.
thin air.
cagedmind0531
I?
forrestjones2010
thin air(period).
new sentence
cagedmind0531
k
forrestjones2010
The tool itself...her suit.
She removed the bottom from the keyboard and scanned for decay on the bottom
bottom used twice
cagedmind0531
fixed
forrestjones2010
nice work on testing the gun
very complex
love it
cagedmind0531
I considered having her make a mistake and the gun incinerating the ball
Might be something to rewrite a little bit.
forrestjones2010
Siren removed herself from the room and called for exodus.
very nice sentence sir
cagedmind0531
ty
forrestjones2010
she called down exodus
sweet
good scene man bravo
cagedmind0531
ty ty
forrestjones2010
you write the future just as adeptply as you write the past
cagedmind0531
Sometimes the future is easier because there is more stuff to describe
Or it feels that way anyway
forrestjones2010
true
cagedmind0531
All the devices and what not
forrestjones2010
i want you to read Jimmys chapter one of his novel
i know
cagedmind0531
I have no problem with that
forrestjones2010
you will die
cagedmind0531
why is that?
forrestjones2010
it is one of the prettiest things i have ever read
cagedmind0531
Maybe so but it's no Ind!
forrestjones2010
of course not
cagedmind0531

forrestjones2010
baufuoeee!
its in a totally different genre
cagedmind0531
cool beans
forrestjones2010
ty for being patient with my marital problems
cagedmind0531
It's cool man. I just hope things work out for the better...whatever that may mean
forrestjones2010
i am sorry they are occuring at this critical juctiutre in the book
bottom line Tish is jealous
she would never admit it but she always has been
of the time i speand with my art and writing
cagedmind0531
Beth gets jealous too, but I don't care. I realize that's selfish but if she made me choose there would be no choice.
forrestjones2010
she feels i give her the back seat to these
and maybe i do
and maybe thats not fair
i dont know
cagedmind0531
Yeah I totally understand
Women are very insecure
forrestjones2010
i was an artist before i was a husband and i am a selfish bastard most of the time
yup
anywho
cagedmind0531
Marriage doesn't define you as a person Forrest. Too many think that being a significant other means forgetting yourself. The truth is if you
forrestjones2010
i have to look at it like this...i am not a drunk
cagedmind0531
can't be yourself there is no relationship anyway.
forrestjones2010
i dont do drugs...anymore
i dont sleep around
i pay bills
i clean up ...sometimes
cagedmind0531
The problem is Forest
forrestjones2010
deal with the rest
cagedmind0531
The more you give
The more she'll want
Forrest*
forrestjones2010
rightly said sir
thats exacly it
there is never enough and its never good enough
and there is never a ty or an i am sorry
but anywho
i just wanted to ty
cagedmind0531
Well you need to decide if you can still be who you are and be married to her.
That's the question.
forrestjones2010
for understanding
i know
and i think i can
cagedmind0531
That means having to deal with her jealousy
forrestjones2010
i just need some distance and perpective riht now
right
cagedmind0531
Distance from the book? or her you mean?
forrestjones2010
her
cagedmind0531
I see
Do you think it's possible she is still punishing you for your indiscretion?
Or has she been like this since
or before
forrestjones2010
no i am going to,in balance, start taking my pc, to work and working on the book during the day when i can
so look for me more during the day online
cagedmind0531
I will
forrestjones2010
business has calmed down a bit for now
i can squirrel away a couple of good writing hours per day up there now
something i simply couldnt do last month
cagedmind0531
That's cool
forrestjones2010
so that alone should catapult the book forward by a month or so
cagedmind0531
Did you see what I said before? Is it possible she is punishing you for your indiscretion? Or was it like this before that?
forrestjones2010
dont think for an instant that i am not commited
cagedmind0531
I know you're committed
forrestjones2010
my indiscretion
?
cheating
cagedmind0531
yeah
forrestjones2010
oh without a doubt
cagedmind0531
That needs to stop
forrestjones2010
no joke
cagedmind0531
Any thing you did I am sure she has found ways to get back at you.
The balance has been met.
Marriage isn't about revenge
forrestjones2010
should be but aparently she has made it a zero sum game
if that were the case she would just go have an affair and be done with the getting even part
and who is to say she hasnt and this is a guilt manifestation who knows
its all a waste of energy
and the 2010 Forrest does not waste energy
cagedmind0531
She is a master of passive aggressiveness
forrestjones2010
he is Forge and builds things
cagedmind0531
I have never seen anyone better
forrestjones2010
she is indeed a jedi master...biatch
cagedmind0531
rofl
forrestjones2010
at least now i do know she has capacity to lie directly to me without cracking
cagedmind0531
That's scary
forrestjones2010
well...i can too so i guess we are even there...dont ever get married jason
cagedmind0531
Yeah that's what they tell me
Beth doesn't believe in it
I need to ask you something
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
Do you ever look for an out...as in even when you are happy you can foresee something in the future to get you out of this relationship?
Ever do that?
Like for me
It was kids. Beth didn't want kids.
So I had an out in the future
Now she thinks she might and I have no 'out' and it scares me
forrestjones2010
yes i have in the past but not with tish
cagedmind0531
I see
forrestjones2010
i basically put all my outs on the table in advance
my out was kids
my big one anyway
neither of us wanted any
and we have both stayed true to that one
anything else was fair game
never given it much thought past the kid thing
cagedmind0531
I see
Just curious
I didn't know if other people did it too
forrestjones2010
i think its common
but i have been off the dating path for 10 years now
cagedmind0531
Yeah that changes your perspective a bit
forrestjones2010
yeah
sometimes i think it would be fun to date then i am like helln bent no...gives me tha cave
cagedmind0531
lol
About the only good thing about the dating is sex. The rest of it sucks
forrestjones2010
pretty much
cagedmind0531
So you going to bed or wanna keep working?
forrestjones2010
i am up for now
cagedmind0531
k
Chapter 9 or just wanna bs?
forrestjones2010
where are we going with ch 9
i had a vision of AI last night
i say vision because i ws awake when i saw it
it was beautiful
cagedmind0531
Well the festival, the siren scene with them opening the vault, and Coral's death
that's cool
I want to edit what I wrote first with chapter 9 then I want you to take it and elaborate upon it if you can and possibly squeeze some dialogue
forrestjones2010
sure
i think that would do well to get me back into the swing of things
cagedmind0531
I think you'll like it though. I have 2 drugs in it and the after effects of the drug are what start the next day of the festival
forrestjones2010
sweety
cagedmind0531
You'll see what I mean
forrestjones2010
oops
sweet
lol
k
cagedmind0531
well gee thanks forrest
lol
forrestjones2010
didnt think youd let that slide unnoticed
cagedmind0531
lol
The reason Coral dies is not because her purpose faded but because her deathprint held something that was beyond her capability to tell.
So her purpose was to die and give the message
forrestjones2010
k
love it
have we decided on what it says
cagedmind0531
No I can't decide.
Thur?
forrestjones2010
yeah
thinking
cagedmind0531
Wanna edit 9 and see if that helps?
forrestjones2010
sure
cagedmind0531
It's continued on that same post you were on before
forrestjones2010
i didnt see it there
no i do
cagedmind0531
yeah gotta scroll down a little
forrestjones2010
i see it
cagedmind0531
If you start getting tired just go ahead and get some rest. We can work on this tomorrow
forrestjones2010
ok
i am up though
cagedmind0531
k
forrestjones2010
i was looking at some concert info
i am taking canan to a concert in dallas this w/e
cagedmind0531
Yeah I noticed you on myspace, the Flaming Lips
forrestjones2010
needed to get the scoop
k
cagedmind0531
with ya
forrestjones2010
love the opening
therian/Human history
she could let him finishspeaking and then add...they are to be called human now...or Our children are to be called human now
cagedmind0531
good idea
forrestjones2010
t is true they are new to the concept of generational deaths but they will endure, they will strengthen
they will strengthen as time begins to lay itself upon time
ide
idea
i have an idea
cagedmind0531
?
forrestjones2010
what if her death print serves several functions
for instance it commuicates something as intended
2nd
if taken back to her original cell it reveals a hidden chapter of the book of IND
3rd a potential weapon or entry point to a plane for Siren or iboga
4th a soul for AI
just ideas
cagedmind0531
What if it's a gateway through time
forrestjones2010
hmmmmm
cagedmind0531
To save Kalyx
And it's revealed at the appropriate time
forrestjones2010
where is she right now
cagedmind0531
She's about to speak
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
I figured ti appropriate for her to throw a dig at her absent father at the same time she is consoling Coral
forrestjones2010
can what ever her deathprint becaomes be shelved and contained by the EOTI until it can be studied and used later
?
cagedmind0531
Yeah we can do that. Syrka already has it stored secretly
You'll get to that though
forrestjones2010
cool ...i would really like to see it be versatile
cagedmind0531
I'm using Madame btw, I like the way it sounds
Better then Miss or Mrs.
Lame words
forrestjones2010
good call
madame leatherface
cagedmind0531
ha
Finish Coral's death yet?
forrestjones2010
reading now
it's message will serve more purpose then my life will.
life has.
?
cagedmind0531
?
forrestjones2010
than my life wil.
cagedmind0531
bah I do that all the time
forrestjones2010
should be than my life has.
i think it is a tense issue
nothing major
do i stop at her death?
cagedmind0531
No. But you can give an opinion right fast of it
forrestjones2010
its tight
cagedmind0531
Ok good.
forrestjones2010
i like it i cant see anything besides the tense thing
cagedmind0531
The whole, one person speaking their reservations at a time thing works?
forrestjones2010
i would like the print to be 3d
in this case it does only because she is dieing
death monolouging is ok
however you spell that
cagedmind0531
k good
forrestjones2010
read on through party?
cagedmind0531
aye
forrestjones2010
can print be 3d and versitile?
cagedmind0531
Yeah sure
forrestjones2010
i want to draw that slut i know what it looks like i can see it right now
cagedmind0531
cool
forrestjones2010
you ever see those conical incense burners made of polished brass?
bout an inch and a half tall
look like little shiny pyramids
cagedmind0531
yeah I think so
forrestjones2010
take 2 of those...just the tops...glue them together levetate and spin...instant Coral deathprint
cagedmind0531
That can all be added
forrestjones2010
right very minor final stuff/nerd copy
cagedmind0531
Nah it can be added when you tweak nine
forrestjones2010
oh ok cool
do you want so real names for some funk brew?
cagedmind0531
I don't know. Montum sounds kinda fun
forrestjones2010
it does...like momintum...fuck juice
we could put it in a can and sell it
cagedmind0531
Well the drug does things that normal drugs don't do
forrestjones2010
nice
cagedmind0531
It has an after effect as well as the initial effect which triggers the next day
forrestjones2010
indeed burned brighter, their lives taking on much more meaning due to the short span of their existence
lives take
cagedmind0531
Not sure if that sounds right
In the context of the entire sentence I mean
forrestjones2010
k
but all were required to participate in the day to honor Gaia.
i dont know if i would make it "required"
participation
this was an Iboga concept
i would imply everone just did
or wanted to
cagedmind0531
Yeah I can take that out. That's a good idea
So it was people injested the chemical, usually reluctantly but in the end all aquiesced to honor Gaia.
forrestjones2010
did you listen to that death march song before or after you wrote this piece?
that works
cagedmind0531
I listened to it before but honestly I couldn't understand the words. The melody was great though
forrestjones2010
i will have to dig up the words
i will insert them and tweak them to our will mwahahahahaha
cagedmind0531

So far it's better then the way I had it before?
forrestjones2010
tolls on the bodies systems.
bodiess'
i think
plural possesive
it is awesome...i was really into it
cagedmind0531
Ok cool. It's a bit different format then what we're used to
More descriptive less eventful
forrestjones2010
it has he feel of the scene from the matrix where they are in zion dancing to rave music and trinity and neo do it
it has that kind of energy
it is very impactful
cagedmind0531
Yeah I considered having Iboga arrive on the 3rd day when everyone was tripping on the haze effect
That would be pretty epic
forrestjones2010
we need to discuss the dead returning
cagedmind0531
k
forrestjones2010
in general
cagedmind0531
I don't want it
Generally
imo
forrestjones2010
who all is going to return
i dont either
cagedmind0531
I don't want people thinking, oh this person might come back
I want them thinking
This person is toast
forrestjones2010
dead is dead
cagedmind0531
Unless it's a bad guy
Then they shouldn't know
forrestjones2010
?
so iboga cant come back and neither can gaia
cagedmind0531
Well if a good guy dies he/she should be dead [usually]
forrestjones2010
only rumors and memories
cagedmind0531
But villains can sometimes
forrestjones2010
explain
f all dead hoes
am i caught up btw?
cagedmind0531
Well if a villain dies it adds to the mystery if you aren't certain they died
Yes you are caught up
forrestjones2010

cagedmind0531
So I think you can probably find some good ways to tweak both
The festival especially
forrestjones2010
k
i will
cagedmind0531
I am not sure it's possible to add dialogue to it
So are you not keen on Iboga returning?
I don't care if he does or not but he is fairly developed villain
forrestjones2010
its ok i just think it needs to be done carefully
i dont want it to come across like yugiohi or somethin dragon ball zish
i really didnt want to see Gaia again
she needs perpetual ascension
cagedmind0531
I didn't plan on seeing her again
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
I figured Graven would start dreaming of her maybe to tie it in a bit
forrestjones2010
dreams visions romurs any of that is all cool just "reality" isnt
i better try to sleep its 4
cagedmind0531
Ok man. See ya online tomorrow
forrestjones2010
good to get caught up...i will get to work today
cagedmind0531
ok sounds good
forrestjones2010
ok man thank again for listening
cagedmind0531
always!
forr

Tuesday, March 9, 2010

Siren's Robbery and Chapter 9 Start

With that Siren flicked her wrist and then vanished from sight. The suit bent the light around her taut frame. She made her way back to the auction barely in time to find the hooded figure leaving . The safe was already deposited in the armored truck outside.

Siren activated the suits magnetic fingertips and scaled the armor car as it took off. She laid in wait as the tight turns and curves gave way to the smooth straight elegance of the 22nd Century highway. Once the truck was on smooth pavement she began to work. The powder combination she used at the Museum was not effective on metal and thus she had to use other means to enter the car.

She removed from her belt a compass with a spinning grinder which she used to scribe a circle into the top of the car. Moments later the compass took on a mind of it's own and began to spin, scribing the circle deeper and deeper, the noise was muffled due to a synthetic gel which siren had covered the entire circle in designed specifically to absorb sound waves and vibration. She attached a lifter to the car as she did before in the museum. Once the compass ate through the roof of the truck the lifter took off, taking with it the chunk of metal to be deposited some random place when the lifter's battery power subsided.

Siren entered the car to find a large robotic gun guarding the small vault, the setup was obviously motion triggered and to her guess sound sensitive. Luckily the gel had done it's work well and it remained idle and unactivated. Very gently and silently the invisible Siren dropped into the truck, her suit diverting the light and thus concealing her movements.

The gun itself possessed a console with a standard alphanumeric interface resembling a keyboard. This was Siren's forte. Anything electronic she felt a kindredship with, a cold lifeless friendship. Steadily she removed a tool from her belt resembling a screwdriver but with a tip designed to replicate the needed tool for whatever the job. With each action she noticed the decibals on the machine elevating, the trigger apparently being a soft whisper in the sound proof armored room, the soft whisper from the air passing by from the hole Siren drilled. She knew her laser to be near silent on plastic targets but the motion of such a small tool may activate the gun. She took a chance. A laser materialized out of thin air, the tool itself as well as Siren concealed by the attributes of her suit. The gun did not activate. It was obvious that so long as she cut beneath the keyboard her movements would go undetected.

She removed the bottom from the keyboard and scanned for decay on the bottom of the alphanumerical pad. Her scan revealed a .1 micrometer offset in several of the keys. She set the keys to memory then removed a small wire from the keyboard and cut it in half. Still no reaction from the gun. She plugged the wire to her pad and programmed the 9 most probable letters and numbers. Passively her panel tested each combination until finally the sequence revealed itself. The pad keyed in the sequence then the gun jerked violently, and collapsed, no longer responsive to movement. She tested the gun by throwing a rubber marble across the vaulted room, when it did not react she deactivated the suit.

Siren removed the wire from her pad and attached another lifter to the vault which she then guided through the hole in the ceiling. She dialed in another number on her pad and a drone courtesy of Solomon United arrived and took the vault away to headquarters. Before leaving she thought for a moment then decided to reprogram the number used to remotely deactive the gun. The gun would now fire on anyone opening the vehicle. Siren removed herself from the room and called for exodus. Another larger drone flew by dropping a rope upon her, which she grabbed. The drone carried her off as well. From a rear view mirror Syrka watched as an unknown figure flew off into the distance, he was unaware the vault was already gone.





























Chapter 9



Coral was dying. Her life had marked it's purpose strong and certain amongst the community, now it was her time to leave this world. The bright cobalt ether that functioned as her energy for life was beginning to fade in vibrancy not color. It assured her that she had a soul, and that it would shortly be on it's way to Gaia.

"I have called you here Syrka, Veyn, Kalyx, Graven, and Adahn on the eve of my demise. More then any other but Gaia, have you touched my life."

"Coral you can't go. We still need you desperately. Deaths are happening more and more now and the people are not prepared to deal with this amongst the air of having to build a graveyard for the first time in Etherian/Human history." Syrka spoke without reservation and much fear.

"It is true they are new to the concept of generational deaths but they will endure, they will strengthen." Coral said reassuringly.

"We have no community leaders who are not Etherian. You are the anchor that keeps our will from drifting away." Veyn spoke from his vantage of leadership, for he was now well known as head of the guard in Axium.

"The time has come for humans to assert themselves. This is no longer the era of Etherians. Our time is passing and a new generation is coming to terms with their place in the world."

"The community is an arch in structure with you as it's keystone, how will we manage without your wisdom?" asked Adahn with sincerity.

"My guidance is something you will all have to live without, and surely you may crumble under the weight of burdens so too will you rise from the rubble and rebuild."

"Coral..You have been my mother and my father during these few long years I have been alive. I have relied on you to guide my heart and to foster my strength of being. I will never forget you or your sacrifices."

This comment particularly stung Graven, having been away the 37 years from his daughter. The time was long lost to the First Book of Ind written scribed in Coral's own ether.

"My dear young one. You were touched by the goddess herself. If ever I learned anything it was from knowing you, watching you grow, and basking in the light of your radiance.

Finally Graven spoke as leader once again, for the first time since he left.

"In our short time together before I left you taught me more about myself then I ever could have hoped to learn on my own. You were the facilitator of my wife's death and yet I bear you no ill fate.
You sent me away from my daughter and if I were to ever regret anything it would be that, no matter the importance of what I have learned. However I will always be thankful you graced to touch my life. Our home, our city will be less without you in it but we will endure and see your dreams done."

"My friends time is short. I thank you all for your kindness and in leaving this world I know I have found true friends and touched pure hearts. Let no one stand in the way of bringing harmony to the Age of Gaia and the light of her creations. If everyone has said their peace I must speak with Syrka alone. It is a matter of grave importance.

The others seemed reluctant at first to leave her side in these last moments, but in the end they respected her wishes. They left her and Syrka to their business.

"Syrka I have urgent matters to discuss with you."

"Of course Madame Coral, the Eoti are always at your call." Syrka spoke with the correct assumption that she wanted to speak to him with regard to his position as Headmaster of the Eoti.

"My deathprint will be of great importance in the coming days. I want you to see to it personally."

"But Etherians are not capable of Deathprinting, I am merely a figurehead. The students do the real work. I am just a guide."

"Typically that may be the case but in light of the fact that I am one of the few Etherians with a soul, it must be done by the like."

"I see...I am familiar with the ritual. I will make preparations at once."

"I must insist that the print is made public at the appropriate time."

"This is not standard procedure Madame Coral, to do so would expose the ways of the Eoti to all of Axium."

"Little will be exposed I assure you. The deathprint is merely a statement of things to come and will be seen as my last wishes. It can safely be put forth without fear of illuminating the Emissaries."

"But why not just tell us now, what can your print tell us that you cannot."

"Young one, the reason my time has come is in large part due to the print I will leave, it's message will serve more purpose then my life will. I cannot tell you what it says because the light from it blinds me even in dreams."

"Very well Madame Coral, I will see it done."


* * * * * *

Despite the demise of Coral this past week now was a time of celebration, bittersweet though it may be life went on. It had been 40 years since the death of Gaia and the ritual to the day and the festival preparations were already long underway at the time of Coral's death. The festival was three days long with each day devoted to a new theme. The city set aside all it's troubles, death and sadness.

The first day of the festival consisted of artistic expression and dance, The Forgotten Day of Bliss
It was meant to honor the life of Gaia and her light heart. The entirety of the populace of Axium dressed scantily and adorned themselves with tattoos of all expressive and colorful manner. Along with this came the ritual of dance and the inhalement of a aphrodisiac called Monichtum or Montum for short. The day was a celebration of love and life.

For the first time the festival was orchestrated by humans, as Coral had instructed. It was their era and their responsibility now. The Etherians were merely observers, citizens of the body whole.
Many among the festival were pure humans, that is they were one generation seperated from the evolution of Etherials to Humanity.

The Festival of the Gaiaspheric Saint took on whole new attributes under it's new human founders. There was a passion never before seen, an intensity inherent in everything they touched. For though their candle of life burned faster then Etherians, it indeed burned brighter, their lives taking on much more meaning due to the short span of their existence. It was easy to see that each body held the soul that Etherians had to strive so hard to attain.

This new vibrance asserted itself in many ways upon the first day of the festival. Many of the humans chose to adorn themselves with tattoos only, foregoing clothing of any sort other then rings upon the ears, toes and fingers, bracelets or necklaces. The dancers ringed around fires as their frolicking silhouettes danced about the firelight like mad shadows raging against all trappings.

The thumping tribal music overcame the moans and grunts. There was lovemaking and celebration under the influence of Montum. The body could handle only light doses of the potent aphrodisiac but there was no shortage of the purple powder among the masses.

The night burned and blazed with no memories or regrets. The sideaffects of Montum being short term memory loss and intense sorrow when the high wore off. These sideaffects only served to heighten the meaning of the 2nd day, the Day of Fathomed Sorrow.

This day was to mourn the loss of loved ones and more specifically the death and sacrifice of Gaia. In the light of recent years rumour of the Eoti had surfaced only to the extent of their masked visages being seen at times of death. So it was that masked faces were the 'face' of the 2nd day.

People dressed in all manner of costume to conceal and portray their grief at the same time. This was all the more real due to the aftereffects of Montum. People fathomed to remember the day before and the possible repurcussions of their actions under the drug. This was all part of the experience.

The costumes mostly consisted of different attributes of people's personality. Some dressed as love or hate, others of law or recklessness. All the masks and costumes were images of despair and darkness. The abstraction serving the overall confusion inherent in death and the mysteries of what lied beyond now that Gaia had gifted them souls.

On this day people injested a concoction known as Hauntlore. The name deriving from the drink's ability to bring your past to haunt you. So it was people injested the chemical, usually reluctantly but all were required to participate in the day to honor Gaia. Veyn's guards even had to force the drug on those still hungover from the previous days' festivities. Many people walked about murmuring in sadness, lost in the veil of the drink. Each moment was visited by their mistakes of the past and the weight of their future decisions.

In addition to taking Hauntlore and wearing costumes and masks the people of Axium gathered together en masse to sing a dirge, a deathmarch song to remember the dead and usher their souls to Gaia.

[Insert Deathmarch Song]


The side effects of Hauntlore hit the next day. All manner of psychadelic color littered the sight of every woman and man. The shapes of all life became ethereal and mystic, as if they were there and not there. This 3rd and final day commemorated the advent of souls upon the human condition, the Sight of Spirits. The sacrifice of mortality was met with the eternal gift of life after death.

The after effects of Hauntlore also deadened the nerves. No one was capable of feeling any physical pain or even able to feel the touch of others. It was as if everyone merely floated through the city, their bodies merely vessels for the souls within. It was a trascendant experience, as if one soared on wings of effervescence.

The festival conluded in a song of celebration, hummed in harmony to the flow of the wind.

[Insert the Harmony of Souls]

Twilight signaled the end of the Festival of the Gaiaspheric Saint and upon it's conclusion all came to rest in their abodes. The three days of celebration were followed by three days of rest, the drugs having taken severe tolls on the bodies systems. It was not uncommon for the people to spend the entire three days in bed to recover.

Friday, March 5, 2010

Chapter 9 March 05, 2010

Chapter 9



People were dying. This was not something that Etherians were used to and now that they were human many were having trouble wrapping their minds around that fact. Only recently did people really take note as one generation had began to pass away and fade into the next. It mattered not to them that an afterlife was assured and that it's freedom and majesty transcended anything on this earth. All they knew was that their loved ones were dead and that they would never hold them again in this life.

It was the anniversary of Gaia's death and only recently had they began constucting a great graveyard to commemorate the lost. The first few deaths seemed almost to be celebrated, people accepting the fact and honoring the time they had with them, their souls granting them reprieve from the labors of life. Over time however as the elder generation began to pass things began to change.The society was no longer fathered and mothered by those of three to four hundred years old. Their wisdom lost to the ages beyond what they had recorded in scribe or told in tale.

A new age, a new generation was coming to light and power and death was something they were never taught to deal with. Deaths were so rare in Etherian society. This year there were many more deaths then usual, with over 15 elders passing in a single year of old age. Were it not for the guidance of Coral, the eldest surviving Etherian, nearly all guidance would be lost.The structure of Etherian, now human, society was changing. They were thankful to Gaia for saving them but sometimes they questioned Coral about the necessary cost of the cure.

Despite these troubled times however now was a time for celebration. The Festival of the Gaiaspheric Saint. The festival was several days long to commemorate both her sacrifice and the triumph of life over Iboga's curse. The cost was high to be certain but people were no less thankful, no matter the doubts.

The first day of the festival dealt with what little was known about Gaia's life. People danced around in creative tattoos and gave thanks for life and wellbeing. They sculpted and painted and sang. There were no judgements or embarassment, just freedom, the freedom of Gaia's life.

The second day all faced death in imagery and costume. The death of Gaia and her sacrifice though it was first a festival of artistic expression.

Thursday, March 4, 2010

convo 3.4.2010am

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forrestjones2010
back
cagedmind0531
cool beans.
This is some of the best stuff I have written I think
forrestjones2010
the orbs i imagined as energy mechanisms
which part
cagedmind0531
I've written like 4 pages since you last read
forrestjones2010
oh i thought you were talking about mine
cagedmind0531
Oh haha.
Don't be sad dear Forrest
forrestjones2010
you dont like my fetus
i cant help it i got knocked up ok
cagedmind0531
Ok let's go ahead and discuss this.
forrestjones2010
i am a tramp
discuss on
you are so to tha point
cagedmind0531
I don't want her wanting to get pregnant. I want her to stop them from killing the baby and then they offer her to carry it and she starts to
forrestjones2010
are you german
cagedmind0531
kinda cringe
One thing you totally forgot I bet
The baby
Has no soul
The Gaia tree took it's soul
forrestjones2010
how could the baby have no soul
ooooooohhhhhh
cagedmind0531
Remember when I wrote about the Gaia tree flower
forrestjones2010
well even better
a souless killer kills more efficiently
are you really tht against this idea
cagedmind0531
No. I'm just letting you know the realities of what we are facing if we do it.
Seriously I like the idea. I'm not bsing you.
forrestjones2010
if
Jason i do not get near this picky whith critique on my end
what gives
what is bsing?
cagedmind0531
I know ya don't. It's just part of us working together.
bullshitting
forrestjones2010
o
cagedmind0531
Let's just talk about Siren a sec though.
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
Didn't we want her to hate her human side? and isn't carrying a baby quite a bit human
It's probably the most human thing someone can do
forrestjones2010
she doesnt want to nanny out
she just wants to carry it birth it then she is done
she would not raise it
cagedmind0531
You are right I am being hard on you about this. I apologize. I just want us on the same page.
forrestjones2010
and in the future it wouldnt be 9 month
i just have to tell you that i would write allot more but it seems like you dont trust where i take things
cagedmind0531
You want her to have the baby so it gives her some odd tie to Graven. Is that right?
forrestjones2010
right
cagedmind0531
I like this idea. I trust you Forrest it's just sometimes I think you focus on your part and lose sight of things we already wrote about.
Like the baby not having a soul. Ya didn't think about that did ya
forrestjones2010
no i did not
cagedmind0531
That's all I am saying. You have a million things going on in your life. I eat, sleep, and breathe the Ind.
It stands to reason I would notice things you don't
forrestjones2010
yeah you're right
cagedmind0531
I want you writing more because honestly just me writing alone gets very weak at times
I have taken some liberties lately because you have been really busy
forrestjones2010
k
we can move on
cagedmind0531
Don't think for a minute I want to take over this. I swear I don't. I really need your writing.
forrestjones2010
i didnt think that
i just didnt feel trusted thats all
like what is this dumbass thinking
cagedmind0531
I trust you. Just next time tell me what you plan on writing and I'll let you know if it's consistent with what we've been doing
Or if there is something you forgot maybe
If I had as much as you do on my plate I'd be a wreck
forrestjones2010
thats the thing my creative process is different from yours in that regard
i dont know what i am going to write sometimes until i sit down
thats why i say throw it away if it doesnt work
i mean it
cagedmind0531
My job in this book is to reconcile our two styles to make the finish product as consistent as possible.
It's very difficult sometimes
forrestjones2010
i know...you are doing great too
i come straight outta low cash sometimes
cagedmind0531
low cash?
forrestjones2010
like bazinga nigga shazammmmm
cagedmind0531
lol
forrestjones2010
what tha hell was that
cagedmind0531
I really love the technical aspects you bring to the writing. I can't do that. I don't know enough
Like the surgery and stuff. I knew you'd be good at that
forrestjones2010
rock
so the orbs are a loose reference to 2 things
cagedmind0531
I want this limitation you feel about me not trusting you lifted asap. I want to work with you, not around you.
capiche?
forrestjones2010
yes sir sargent sir
aye aye mate ey
cagedmind0531
ok reference to two things
shoot
forrestjones2010
1 a map of the earth at that time but that wont be mentioned
in detail anyway
cagedmind0531
interesting
forrestjones2010
because her heart is fr the planet
for
cagedmind0531
I caught that
forrestjones2010
and 2 etherians need an energy system sense they dont eat or drink
cagedmind0531
Yeah like a mini reactor
forrestjones2010
so i tied that to chakras
from the indian culture
cagedmind0531
I like that. So long as the reader understands what a chakra is. Might wanna make a small annotation about it.
forrestjones2010
so each orb could have a corresponding rune emblazened on it
cagedmind0531
They can't see runes though
forrestjones2010
i would not use the word chakra
right
orb will be used and dense spheres of energy
things like this but i based this off of these concepts
the reader wont read any of what i am telling you
cagedmind0531
k
forrestjones2010
i can wrap the surgery up in 3 or 4 more paragraphs
let me tell you why i like the baby better than kaylx being bducted
cagedmind0531
Kalyx is like 28 right now btw
forrestjones2010
i did not know 28 years would pass
the dramatic tension is gone
cagedmind0531
I didn't either
and you're right
forrestjones2010
if it were to have happened shortly after the death
cagedmind0531
Graven would have fallen apart
forrestjones2010
say a few weeks then bam missing baby
cagedmind0531
But it didn't
forrestjones2010
right
now we have mystery
baby
tie to siren
most important myth
brb
cagedmind0531
l
k
forrestjones2010
i got about 20 minutes or so
til 8ish
cagedmind0531
you wanna read what I wrote or wait till later tonight?
forrestjones2010
so now we have a stronger myth base
cagedmind0531
later would be better, let's work this out first
forrestjones2010
later
lets discuss a bit more
cagedmind0531
k
forrestjones2010
or do we need to?
cagedmind0531
let's work it out a bit
Let's rework it a bit though to make Siren reluctant to do it, but it's either that or the baby dies kinda thing
That would make me happy
One potential problem with this baby situation
I was planning on the abduction being later in the book.
Because
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
The climax of the book happens later. If the AI has the baby now though...
Why not go to the gaia tree and do it now
Does he not think to use the babies ether maybe?
forrestjones2010
The modus of AI is to collect weapons to store them for potential use in the future
not to use them now necessarily
i think AI doenst think about the scenario unti later
much later
because it has no soul
cagedmind0531
If it has no soul that could be a reason to abduct Kalyx...
I didn't think about that
forrestjones2010
how could something with no soul help him creat a soul is what he/it is thinking
there you are
kaylx is still needed
or perhaps kaylx is somehow attracted to Lotus and seeks her out
cagedmind0531
Maybe Lotus can't help because she has no soul and then later in some epifany the AI realizes why her Ether won't work.
forrestjones2010
oh
idea
there is another function of the chakras
One Etherian can track or feel another one with in a certain plane or viccinity
like magnets
cagedmind0531
Are you cool with changing her to being reluctant btw?
forrestjones2010
ofcourse
cagedmind0531
ok cool
forrestjones2010
she is a bitch
cagedmind0531
lol
forrestjones2010
why would she be cuddly
i have had a blast fuck day thanks for your patience
cagedmind0531
So he takes the babies ether. Siren tests it again. It fails. This time because she has no soul the tree reaacts violently
forrestjones2010
sweet
cagedmind0531
Siren has an oh shit experience
the tree is trying to kill her
if it gets a hold of her she's dead
blast fuck day?
forrestjones2010
meaning it was good but it was extremely jam packed with many moving parts
cagedmind0531
gotcha
forrestjones2010
plus i just like to type the f word some times
cagedmind0531
lol
By the way
forrestjones2010
makes me feel like the fonzy
cagedmind0531
brace yourself
150 pages
forrestjones2010
wowsers
no way
cagedmind0531
yes way
forrestjones2010
sweet black jesus onions batman
cagedmind0531
My copy is at 73 pages and I haven't added yours yet
73.5 pages I mean
forrestjones2010
thats half way
cagedmind0531
it surely is
forrestjones2010
we are writers
fo realz
cagedmind0531
haha
Just curious. Do you know how much money an average selling book pays the writer?
Just curious
forrestjones2010
no clue
but i have started making calls on the marketing end of things aready
today i called barnes and noble
just local author promotion stuf
cagedmind0531
You realize if we write at the rate we are writing now we will be done with a rough copy by June
forrestjones2010
June was the target i had in mind
Pubished by December
cagedmind0531
I can tell you write now that I can easily write 4 pages a day if we have it worked out
Working the chapters out is the time consumer
forrestjones2010
i am good at that part
right?
cagedmind0531
yes
very
forrestjones2010
i love that part actually
cagedmind0531
Yeah I love the back and forth of it
forrestjones2010
i have tons of this stuff and other stories back logged up there
me too
lets go all the way with this and we can continue on man
cagedmind0531
by the way if there are orbs in the body
have them have nerves all through them or something
Yeah I'm psyched
forrestjones2010
ok
any other body parts you want
i took it easy on the glands
cagedmind0531
glands are fine. write what you know
forrestjones2010
although i have to write about the vajay jay
cagedmind0531
lol
forrestjones2010
Gaia's va jay jay was smoking
cagedmind0531
rofl
I am officially disturbed
Color me disturbed
forrestjones2010
that'll sell an extra 20k copies and reach into the 13 year old crowd
f
do
e
os
m
l
mk
cagedmind0531
ROFL
forrestjones2010
right
cagedmind0531
hi tish
forrestjones2010
no joke
moving on
looks like i get to stay online tish got on line
cagedmind0531
Oh I was thinking also that he could use the orbs to power the artifact later
forrestjones2010
so when does that come on the scene
cagedmind0531
After the scalping or whatever
forrestjones2010
i cant wait
cagedmind0531
yeah the end of the book should be interesting
So Chapter 9
forrestjones2010
this book is scaring me how good it is
cagedmind0531
That's good news. But we aren't exactly our harshest critics
One element that concerns me is developing future Graven
He needs half a chapter or so
soon
forrestjones2010
he does
hey gotta run...or walk the dogs rather...be on later
cagedmind0531
k laters
forrestjones2010
sup?
cagedmind0531
Not much, ready to get some work done?
forrestjones2010
yes
cagedmind0531
Have fun getting walked by the dogs? lol
forrestjones2010
the mastiff i have no patiance with so i walk the rot
tish gets the ox
she likes pain
cagedmind0531
lol
forrestjones2010
lets work
cagedmind0531
K the latest is posted on the RD site
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
You wanna edit tonight or just read?
forrestjones2010
i am flexible wahtch need
cagedmind0531
Just edit as ya go
forrestjones2010
k
on eoti right?
cagedmind0531
yes
forrestjones2010
k
starting
she understands completely.
28 years and she isnt mad at all
cagedmind0531
Good point. I will get to that later in the story.
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
Coral is basically playing ignorant right now
forrestjones2010
gotcha
cagedmind0531
That may need to be changed later though. I'll make a note of it
So you know I have 2 backups of the writing on my computer and I just mailed myself another one.
I need to put one on a disk
forrestjones2010
email me what you have now
i havent gotten a revision lately
cagedmind0531
Sent'
forrestjones2010
k
within 27 minutes the
will you change this to 49 minutes
?
cagedmind0531
sure...
any reason?
forrestjones2010
it is a buddist belief
but it is 49 days
any buddist would catch it and say "right on"
cagedmind0531
haha
forrestjones2010

i wasnt just being a jerk was i?
cagedmind0531
Let me know if you find that number again so I can correct it
No...
forrestjones2010
k
cus i think i may have been a jerk earlier...sorry if i was
cagedmind0531
Nah it's cool. No more then I was
forrestjones2010
when you work this close with someone you care about you just have to be careful
cagedmind0531
aye
forrestjones2010
the last thing i want to do is offend you
cagedmind0531
I really can't be offended. In fact I wish you were a bit harsher a critic
forrestjones2010
what is Vyskara mean?
cagedmind0531
random word
forrestjones2010
i like the word
cagedmind0531
haha
forrestjones2010
it has character seems like sanskrit
or something old
cagedmind0531
I thought it sounded too much like Mascara when I first wrote it
rofl
forrestjones2010
no it works well
so one soul is one character like chinese
thats elegant
i like
do we want to call it a "secret" society out right?
cagedmind0531
not sure, thoughts?
forrestjones2010
i would put this in parenthisis to come back to later
first inclination is to say no
cagedmind0531
I mean they aren't supposed to tell anyone about it so whether we say it or not there it is
forrestjones2010
right...let it establish itself as a secret
qestion
cagedmind0531
shoot
forrestjones2010
he has not told coral where he has gotten the book
or has he
cagedmind0531
hmmm
forrestjones2010
she said she was blind
cagedmind0531
I figured it was assumed because it was what she wrote. I mean she may be blind but she knew she wrote something
forrestjones2010
you wrote that yesterday right?
cagedmind0531
I don't remember. Either yesterday or today
forrestjones2010
k
so coral knows she wrote the book?
cagedmind0531
If I wasn't clear on that I need to be. I'll correct it.
forrestjones2010
my understanding is that she does not know she wrote the book
is my understanding correct?
cagedmind0531
Hmm I don't know honestly
forrestjones2010
give me a sec i will brb
back
cagedmind0531
k
forrestjones2010
i would like to see her not know much of what she wrote
but anywho moving on
cagedmind0531
I noted it
You know what's kind of funny
forrestjones2010
k
what that
cagedmind0531
Syrka.. When we first wrote him he was a secretive character
Now suddenly the perfect role arrives for him and he is the only one with a major part till now
Eerie
forrestjones2010
hmmmm
cagedmind0531
*without a major part
forrestjones2010
Syrka responded well to his appointment while the three others seemed more confused then anything else.
then=than
There were chirping sounds coming from the forest...
uh huh
cagedmind0531
uh huh?
forrestjones2010
there were chirping sounds coming from forest.
lol
nevermind
cagedmind0531
I'm lost
rofl
Is that too corny?
forrestjones2010
no
Grimorum
is that a real bee?
cagedmind0531
No
forrestjones2010
nice work
cagedmind0531
lol
forrestjones2010
so i guess Kalypsian isnt either
cagedmind0531
nope surely not
forrestjones2010
the gods will surely hang us by the rafters
cagedmind0531
I bet book nerds everywhere will be pulling out their wikipedias
There is no Grimorum Bee! what the hell!
forrestjones2010
no doubt...great words btw
i made up the word libraric
one day
and someone was like
thats nota word
i said go to hell it is
cagedmind0531
lol
forrestjones2010
anyways
cagedmind0531
I don't really like using made up words unless they are pronouns.
Pronouns I figure it doesn't matter
forrestjones2010
lol
weirdo
i'll bastardize anything i am no purist...give me photoshop i can get the red out
cagedmind0531

forrestjones2010
they need an oath
the Eoti def need an oath
cagedmind0531
We already had an oath in the book
The oath of community or whatever.
forrestjones2010
but this is a secret soc.
cagedmind0531
With the star and all that
forrestjones2010
whats a sec soc without an oath?
cagedmind0531
If you want to write one go for it
forrestjones2010
that simply will not do
i will
cagedmind0531
It better not have any pregnancies in it though
rofl
forrestjones2010
drat
we can build subcultures and haloween myths on top of these guys
and devil worship
and all manners of evil are their fault
cagedmind0531
lol
forrestjones2010
these are the bad guys...they killed lady diana and michel jackson
cagedmind0531
Did you think the 4th member was corny? His father dying of a heart attack when he was born?
forrestjones2010
i want these guys around in the 6000's when Solomon is full steampunk ahead
no
i like the whole concept...they are everything that will be Macabre
cagedmind0531
Yeah we can tinker with em for sure
forrestjones2010
lots of poential
you see all the pockets we are opening now...you know what they really are?
cagedmind0531
?
forrestjones2010
in themselves they are novels for later
cagedmind0531
conceivably
forrestjones2010
they are
i could stay in a whole just that size for 3 to 6 months
the visuals are bright too
lots of drawings
ok what next?
cagedmind0531
How far did you get?
forrestjones2010
the ind of Eoti.
oh i am copyrighting tommorow btw
i finally have the cash to do it
cagedmind0531
You read the up to where siren vanishes?
That's cool
forrestjones2010
With that the Eoti were formed. A secret organization bent on completing the second book of IND one character at a time. The Eoti became a mystery in Axium. Often and quite randomly the masked people would show up and all knew there was the stench of death to be found. It was almost as if they were the harbringers of death itself. Over the years it became second nature to the Eoti, it was even rumoured that the masked ones could feel death coming.
that is the last thing i read
cagedmind0531
Keep going
forrestjones2010
k
It is a safe of stone design etched in nearly perfectly scribed runes and smoothed to the finish of glass.
near perfect
something isnt working here
cagedmind0531
hmmm
forrestjones2010
The auctioneer gestured over the symbol and the finer points of the safe and it's seemless construction but Siren was more interested in the contents then the vault itself.
then=than
cagedmind0531
It is a safe of stone design etched in nearly perfectly scribed runes. The texture is that of polished glass.
forrestjones2010
its the 2 adverbs
near perfect runes
cagedmind0531
ah ok
forrestjones2010
did you see the then=than?
cagedmind0531
yeah, looking for it
got it
forrestjones2010
She stripped right there before Feinburg careless as if the pretense was gone from their relationship,
carelessly
cagedmind0531
k
forrestjones2010
,
The suit bending
bent
The safe already deposited in the armored truck outside.

the safe "was"
nice work sir
love that sassy Siren
so who is da hooded dude?
cagedmind0531
That scene was kind of hot huh?You should be impressed

forrestjones2010
i was
cagedmind0531
The hooded figure was Syrka
forrestjones2010
you can write Siren well my friend
Syrka
interesting
cagedmind0531
He's the guardian of the Eoti
forrestjones2010
Siren is gonna whopp that
cagedmind0531
Now I get to write a scene where she robs a moving armored truck
forrestjones2010
whoooop whooooop
nice
cagedmind0531
I can't figure out how to do it or I would have written it already
forrestjones2010
hope she doesnt hurt the baby
cagedmind0531
lol
forrestjones2010
maby she can shoot the kid out of her uterus and then...
cagedmind0531
lol
forrestjones2010
gross i said uterus
cagedmind0531
lol
forrestjones2010
so whats next?
cagedmind0531
Figuring out the baby stuff. When is it born. Does she just have it inside a day or two or what. Cause Siren is about to hijack a truck
thoughts?
forrestjones2010
you go hijack away...i'll take car of this nockup slut puppy
i just emailed this to a friend of mine check it out
i prefer to receive real email from real people...dont send me forwords...only people who suck send forwards...this is your first warning
cagedmind0531
lol
forrestjones2010
i just gave him my email adress a few days ago
if he forwardss me crap i am going to go bomb his house i swear
cagedmind0531
lol
forrestjones2010
the venezeualan bastard
cagedmind0531
So chapter 9
lol
forrestjones2010
i'll show him chazez
yeah so anyway
yeah 9
cagedmind0531
hmm
Who watches the kid while Siren's on missions? Uncle Feiny?
forrestjones2010
shut your pie whole
cagedmind0531
lol
forrestjones2010
you have no idea how Solomon United Rols
Roles
she is already out of the picture
cryogenically frozen off in some body bank
cagedmind0531
Ok so what the hell happens in chapter 9. We have a secret society.
forrestjones2010
or being trained in a nunery assasin home
cagedmind0531
rofl
forrestjones2010
ch is a pivot chapter
cagedmind0531
cause it's in the middle of the book?
forrestjones2010
but is it really in the middle though?
thats the ?
cagedmind0531
um...
good question
forrestjones2010
if its a 500 page book and we end it at 320
we are idiots
cagedmind0531
lol
forrestjones2010
where are we on our timeline?
we are in age 2
are we halfway into 2?
or at the end of 2?
cagedmind0531
About 2/5 of the way. Beginning of Age 2.
We always have our ace in the hole. Iboga.
forrestjones2010
so then we truely are about halfway
we have lots of aces
cagedmind0531
What if Coral dies
forrestjones2010
what do we need her for?
cagedmind0531
em community leader
forrestjones2010
we could always start a chamber of commerce for that
cagedmind0531
What if
forrestjones2010
so what are the major arcs that need to take place between now and the end
go ahead
cagedmind0531
There start to be riots because people are starting to die of old age. Something that never happened before when they were Etherians
They know their loved ones live on but it's not enough
forrestjones2010
how does that fit in to Forge?
we need to build something?
cagedmind0531
Well this era is what turned them human.
forrestjones2010
true
cagedmind0531
We just built a gaiasphere structure
forrestjones2010
and we do need some graveyards and funerals
and plagues
and general mayhem
cagedmind0531
For the first time in Etherian history a graveyard is needed
Before people used to live to be 3-400 years old
So by the time one person died the other person had already decomposed
forrestjones2010
so yes this does need to be addressed
cagedmind0531
So Coral tries to keep people composed. Saying it was the price they paid to beat the curse.
So basically the reality of mortality shit hits the fan
One of the Eoti is killed
By a mob
yes/no?
forrestjones2010
so yeah some time does need to be addressed
no Eoti is secret
they go undetected
cagedmind0531
Well the organization is just formed though. It's possible one of them got careless and got seen and since they are associated with death...
It's only natural they would be a scapegoat for the problems of a mortal people
just ideas
forrestjones2010
right
dog attack
i am listening
cagedmind0531
This would be a good spot for a dirge, like a song about death that the people begin to sing.
forrestjones2010
i have several
one made it to chicago recently
cagedmind0531
cool
forrestjones2010
won 2nd place in a national contest
cagedmind0531
That's awesome
forrestjones2010
you can buy it on itunes
cagedmind0531
cool
forrestjones2010
its funny sometimes this dog will not let me get on the computer
he is like you will play with me now
cagedmind0531
Ok so Graven is away or something. On a retreat with his daughter. To get to know her. They go on a trip together.
While they are gone this death movement starts
forrestjones2010
when the time comes remind me and we can pull that song it is call Dancing Inside of the Death March
it would fit perfect here and my frieds band is top notch
cagedmind0531
It's not too long is it?
forrestjones2010
standard song
cagedmind0531
k cool
What if they capture Syrka in the future
as the siren part of the chapter
or should we just leave that to idle for a while
forrestjones2010
wha do you mean leave it to idle?
cagedmind0531
Go away from the siren scene for a bit
or stick with the 1/2 and 1/2 thing we have going?
forrestjones2010
i think it would be interesting id syrka were captured
cagedmind0531
I figure he could get tortured and killed
By Peyton
We need to start establishing Peyton as the antagonist not just of graven but of the world
forrestjones2010
ah so she is back to kill mode
her true self
blood thirsty
cagedmind0531
That will really throw people for a loop after she saved a baby
forrestjones2010
i do love a neurotic psychopath
cagedmind0531
You know I mean capturing future Syrka right?
Not past Syrka.
forrestjones2010
yes
cagedmind0531
k
Ok so what else happens
I can't make that an entire chapter
Not quite enough
forrestjones2010
i would like to discuss large arcs for a moment
cagedmind0531
ok
forrestjones2010
what really large arcs still need to occur
the scalping
cagedmind0531
yes?
forrestjones2010
what else
cagedmind0531
Asimov turning into a tangible villain
Graven survives the scalping and tries to finish the book
forrestjones2010
thinking
cagedmind0531
by the way do you need to get to bed? it's getting late
forrestjones2010
no i was distracted with a picture
i am good for now
you?
cagedmind0531
yeah I'm good
forrestjones2010
sometimes i gimp when we talk
cagedmind0531
haha
forrestjones2010
ok
we need
graven development
we need
kaylx developement
Eoti dev
cagedmind0531
we will remember they are going on a trip
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
So what happens on their trip
forrestjones2010
thats weird 28 years old first time to see pop
pick nick dad
hay i know you been in a cave an all for a while
but uh
how is that crazy book deal ya ot
cagedmind0531
Well she's really resentful at first then something happens where graven almost dies or she almost dies or something and she realizes how much
she loves him and vice versa
forrestjones2010
hmmmmmm
cagedmind0531
Axis has had no parts lately either
Which is kind of troublesome. I'll need to make that an issue. "I have been silent a long time Graven....yadiyadi
forrestjones2010
he needs to speak
i have been thinking that
here is something i dont want to happen
cagedmind0531
ok
forrestjones2010
action or writing for the sake of action or writing
cagedmind0531
Yeah
In other words don't give axis lines just to give him lines, make there be a reason for it
forrestjones2010
if we are not pushing the story forward why not
the whole chapter
thats why we need to take pause and look at where we are and where we need to go
cagedmind0531
What is the goal of their trip?
forrestjones2010
to get her kidnapped i would say
bottom line is we dont give a rip about her
we want his emotional response a deepening of character as protagonist
unless our goal is to in part round her out evenly also
cagedmind0531
No. I don't want her to be a big character. At least I don't think I do.
What if Coral dies and her last request is that they spread her ashes to the four corners of the forest
Or what if it's an extended mission to ascertain whether the Gaia tree has spread it's influence beyond the forest
forrestjones2010
she can die...she played her part for me
in truth she kind of bugs
old crone bag
if we could possibly name a chapter something like this
"Dance With Me Black Through This Murder of Crows"
random thought
i have been dying to use that somewhere
cagedmind0531
hmmm
forrestjones2010
whose extended mission?
cagedmind0531
Why would they go on a trip, there needs to be an additional reason. You don't just say 'let's go on a trip so I can get to know you'
That's corny
Kalyx and Graven
What if the Eoti need more paper. I don't know.
bah
forrestjones2010
yeah a reason is paramount
cagedmind0531
Got it
What if it's the annivesary of Gaia's death.
They want to honor her memory by obtaining a rare flower
forrestjones2010
a Lotus
cagedmind0531
That works.
What happens on their trip
That creates a problem
forrestjones2010
the energy in his chakras is so intense due to being in the cell so long it throws hers out of allignment and causes her to be very sick
cagedmind0531
that's a mouthful
kinda reaching
hmmm
forrestjones2010
yeah
i cant come up with much the whole trip thing is just weak
scrap it
cagedmind0531
Well the trip served 2 purposes
forrestjones2010
lets start there
cagedmind0531
One was to unite her and her dad again.
forrestjones2010
what
cagedmind0531
The other was to leave Coral alone in Axium to deal with Riots
forrestjones2010
ok are we sure we want to go from utopic to dystopic in a few pages
thats a huge transition
i agree with you they do die now
cagedmind0531
Well we don't need riots. Maybe we just need people learning to deal with death
forrestjones2010
do we want to be graphic and morbid and everthing just flat out falls the hell apart and we just built it
cagedmind0531
No. Let's just make the chapter kind of a solemn realization of reality
forrestjones2010
i keep falling back to our guiding light
FORGE
cagedmind0531
Kind of like communism
forrestjones2010
right
make death all plastic and foreign
it always happens to "the others"
cagedmind0531
We can just reaffirm at the end of the chapter that without death there is no appreciation of life.
forrestjones2010
i think the 2 points that the trip needed to adress could be done easily by the community
cagedmind0531
What do you mean?
forrestjones2010
kaylx and graven can reunite through community events
how about a Festival
cagedmind0531
What if the Gaia tree gets sick from when Siren experiments on it in the future
forrestjones2010
ok
cagedmind0531
random idea
forrestjones2010
how would that effect the past though?
cagedmind0531
the tree transcends time
forrestjones2010
now he tells me
cagedmind0531
lol
just making this up
forrestjones2010
i know this
cagedmind0531
actually that won't work
scrap it
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
wait nvm...it could work. If Siren tests the new soulless sample...I don't know
forrestjones2010
what did you think of a ceremony honoring gaia's death
cagedmind0531
By the way we are ahead right now. I still haven't finished 8.
forrestjones2010
ahead of what?
cagedmind0531
Um a festival huh
could work
the festival could take place over several days
day 1, so and so
day 2 so and so
forrestjones2010
i am ready to see the artifact
zarathustra
cagedmind0531
I am honestly drawing a blank tonight
bah
forrestjones2010
the scalping
its no biggie
you have done a ton
and very nice work too sir
the EOTI
cagedmind0531
ty, likewise
forrestjones2010
stuff is top notch
yeah mine is dirty pregnant slutty puppy
cagedmind0531
It would be nice to carry the Eoti stuff over to the next chapter and not just kill it immediately
forrestjones2010
then lets do that becaus there is allot there
adress graven and the daughter issue
make it believable
arc back into Eoti
cagedmind0531
where would the eoti come in?'
how?
forrestjones2010
the beauty of that is all that has to happen is
somebody dies
whack em
cagedmind0531
What if
coral dies and her soulprint or whatever is different
forrestjones2010
i like this
cagedmind0531
It's special somehow and it triggers something
forrestjones2010
go on
cagedmind0531
hmm...not sure
It's a solid direction
ideas?
forrestjones2010
it physically looks different right
cagedmind0531
or something
maybe instead of a letter it gives a page
and that page tells something important
forrestjones2010
what if it is 3 dimensional and it emits sound
its a picture of the Soliton
cagedmind0531
Yeah but how would that move the chapter forward
forrestjones2010
just throuwing up
its a picture of the scalping
and a date
cagedmind0531
How would that affect things in a way that moves the chapter
forrestjones2010
that moves the whole book
which is even better
now we are out of the rut
traction
cagedmind0531
What would I write about?
forrestjones2010
now you have people if you publish
that say
what do we do
how do we pre pare
how far away is it
btw how far away is it?
cagedmind0531
But the Deathprints are secret remember
Couple thousand years I think
forrestjones2010
i know but if Graven knows something that is going to kill 1/3 of the world pop...he is going to save them if he can
he is the hero
ok so its not tommorow
you win back to moving this chapter
cagedmind0531
see what I mean?
forrestjones2010
FORGE
cagedmind0531
It's a great idea but what do I write about
forrestjones2010
got to be building something
cagedmind0531
ok so in the chapter we have 2 arcs, people learning about death at the same time corral's death triggers some revelation
forrestjones2010
The EOTI building their Craft
yes
cagedmind0531
ok so two things now. How does she die and what is the revelation
forrestjones2010
you write the craft i will write the festival
cagedmind0531
k
forrestjones2010
i think the revelation should be the scalping
in part at least
cagedmind0531
make the festival start off by acknowledging death and then over days move toward life
New theme every day
forrestjones2010
k
include Lotus in the revelation somehow
i think i will base the festival loosely on an egyptian death motiff
cagedmind0531
What if
The message concerns one of the Eoti being a murderer
random thought
forrestjones2010
nah
cagedmind0531
let's see
Could always have it talking about Iboga. I know I keep going back to that, just saying
forrestjones2010
i got maybe 10 to 15 more good minute in me
cagedmind0531
k
forrestjones2010
you could
cagedmind0531
the son shall surpass the mother in deaths beyond what she brought in life
or something
forrestjones2010
nice
cagedmind0531
He could crash the festival
forrestjones2010
we are missing something major
wht is it
cagedmind0531
Dont forget to include his daughter and him in the festival btw
forrestjones2010
its like a major character or a major event that is missing
cagedmind0531
not that I can see
forrestjones2010
do you feel that way or is it just late for me
ok
i have this dark feeling that something has been neglected
something big
cagedmind0531
We have plenty of time.
No rush
forrestjones2010
i know
before i start something new i have to tie up the scene i need to finish
then i will join you back over here
cagedmind0531
sounds good
forrestjones2010
i need to get some rest for now though
cagedmind0531
alrighty man. Have a good night
forrestjones2010
hope some of the\at helped
u2
cagedmind0531
it did
forrestjones2010
good talking to you my friend
cagedmind0531
ditto