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forrestjones2010
you up
there?
where you atz
cagedmind0531
here now. was napping
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
So how are these new meds? You've been really quiet for like 4 days
forrestjones2010
same meds higher dosages
cagedmind0531
ah I see. Did you tell him the old ones weren't working?
forrestjones2010
no
just needed a higher dosage on one of them
cagedmind0531
ah ok
forrestjones2010
tish strarted bitching about me being on meds in general
cagedmind0531
Whatever. Let her bitch
forrestjones2010
i will they are really helping me jason..more than i ever thought to be possible
thank you for your support
she whould bitch to God about paradise
cagedmind0531
Well people who are fine don't and can't and usually won't understand
To hell with em
forrestjones2010
i agree
cagedmind0531
So what's been going on dude
Just sleeping alot?
forrestjones2010
yeah that it but when i am not i get lots and lots done
cagedmind0531
That's good
forrestjones2010
you help me through this man
cagedmind0531
Are there any other side effects other then the sleeping?
forrestjones2010
ana little dysfasia...i asked about a watch...i dont where a watch...thats was as i was going to sleep
and diahreahea
cagedmind0531
ha, they all cause diarhea lol
How has work been?
forrestjones2010
fantatic
cagedmind0531
cool beans
When you get used to your meds we need to go back to work asap. I've had no output
forrestjones2010
i am good lets roll
cagedmind0531
You getting on?
forrestjones2010
i am on
cagedmind0531
oh ok
Did we find a solution for chapter 11?
forrestjones2010
yes'3r/3rd/3rd
cagedmind0531
?
forrestjones2010
third iboga destruction/t2 thirds graven kaylx unite again commoe foe/sire
cagedmind0531
hmm, seems kinda broad
I need a direction. Something to keep me focused on writing. I am all over the place lately
forrestjones2010
thats what we agreed on the other day
cagedmind0531
Have you started with chapter 1 yet?
forrestjones2010
not yet
cagedmind0531
k
forrestjones2010
i have beed drawind siren and sculpting the gaisphe seFB
cagedmind0531
ah ok
what were you saying before on what we agreed the other day? my memory is really fuzzy tonight
forrestjones2010
we agreed that you woudl move forwrd...i would help weith bocks...and i would star rewrite of ch one building it out to be a bigger would because it is to small and secluded...
cagedmind0531
ok I remember
forrestjones2010
is that stil good with you?
cagedmind0531
yes
I hate whatever has happened to me. Writing isn't near what it was before
Now I am struggling for a page. Before I was doing 3-7 pages at a time
forrestjones2010
it just means you nead to process dont sweat it...
cagedmind0531
I hope so because nothing is coming
forrestjones2010
if you force it it garbage...or if you force it tiitle it fragements if the ind and use the particles ofr songsor other things...nothing is ever lost
i can write the rest of the book if need be
cagedmind0531
I appreciate the help.
forrestjones2010
i realy can
you may not like it with your control issues but i can finish i t easy
did i offend?
cagedmind0531
Nah, just frustrating sometimes that it comes so easy to you when I am struggling
forrestjones2010
what do you input?
through out the day
cagedmind0531
What do you mean?
forrestjones2010
music tv ames people
games
cagedmind0531
Nothing really. Just games sadly. Movies usually.
forrestjones2010
i am here to help you hash out anything man
that is wht a coauthor does
lets rip i t up
cagedmind0531
I've written a bit, one sec.
forrestjones2010
i don t mind
k
cagedmind0531
"Very well father, we will focus on the ramp."
And so they focused on the ramp ascending the Gaia tree. All traps and weapons had failed up to this point and the golem trudged on dragging nets and logs behind it. Suredly it began to ascend the slope. The pitfalls placed along the ascent were failing as well. Every time Iboga approached one, it was if he sensed the deceit. The golem would kneel down, and then leap forward, shaking the ground with each landing and traversing the pits.
forrestjones2010
this would be a good time to plug in the legions of helpers
cagedmind0531
The crowds gathered and ultimately the only thing standing in the way of the golem and the tree was Graven, all the pitfalls had been traversed. He fell back to the plan and marked the rune for ice upon the steep ascent. The entirety of the ramp grew cold and wet as the water condensed before finally a sheet of ice covered it. The golem ignored it at first then two steps later the friction anchoring the machine collapsed. The machine began to slip down the gradient and after mere moments it was crawling to maintain whatever footing it hoped to hold.
forrestjones2010
ibogas high priests
soryy
i had to do an pgrade
cagedmind0531
ok
forrestjones2010
idea
cagedmind0531
?
forrestjones2010
what if one of the minor suns is summoned by graven and gaia to consume ibago and the mino sun is a prison
cagedmind0531
sun?
Did you read what I wrote?
forrestjones2010
sun in the sky
yes
cagedmind0531
Graven laid there upon his back, it was obvious parts of him were broken. Kalyx ran to his side there upon the ground.
"Father! Father! Are you alright?"
"I will survive Kalyx, but the tree...the tree is condemned. Iboga will enter the sacred spirit realm of Gaia and pollute all within. There is no way to stop him now. Even as these moments pass his drill has made contact with the tree. It doesn't see him as a threat."
"There is one last resort father. I will call to the tree. It will hear me, I feel it."
"No Kalyx, you mustn't. You don't understand! The tree is dark, the only light in the tree is your mom and when she was taken in it calmed the stormed heart of the tree. If you call to her, if her guard slips, there is no telling what darkness will awaken during the distraction.
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
Yes/no?
forrestjones2010
it could work...what bout the sun
that could start the sun worship sect
cagedmind0531
I'm trying to make give us fuel for chapter 11. If something dark awakens in the tree...oh I see what you mean
hmm
What if the sun is the solution to healing the tree in chapter 11
forrestjones2010
could be
cagedmind0531
well the good news is we are at 184 pages
forrestjones2010
nice
cagedmind0531
This is kind of what I have in mind for the end of the book
Graven stood there in the silence after the relic's energy transpired and the husk was before him. The Book of IND sat in his right hand and in his left he now held the ported mind of a machine, the third part of the book. The first part, the book of the body, was born on the wings of coral's death and written in the script of her blood. The second part was transcribed on pages born of soul wax and burnt into reality, the book of the soul. Finally the third part sat within his fingers. It was nothing but a small drive, and now the fate of the universe and all life hung in the balance of his fingertips. This was the book of the mind. Together, Mind, Body, and Soul the book would lay completed and as he sat there reflecting he wondered if it was worth living again. He knew within his
heart he was the one, the final keeper of the book, the one observer to end with all things.
What do ya think?
forrestjones2010
resding
this take al of my endin ou
t
cagedmind0531
As he held the drive in his palm a door made of pure mercury manifested itself. It stood there stark against the bright white background and he knew it was time. As he neared the door began to pulse and as he touched it so was his body drawn within. He stood at the echelon of all time and space and where he expected some mystery or majesty all he found was a lodge...
Here at the end of all things was a cabin. Each wall made of logs and each wall adorned with a different masks. The four masks that made all things sat with their accomplisments annointed in paintings and pictures. The grand timeline of their efforts and milestones. In the far corner sat a crow upon a comfortable sofa chair. It turned to acknowledge Graven before dismissing his presence and making comfortable it's perch in
front of the fire
What about now? Does the rest of it make it better?
forrestjones2010
yes but i would like to see siren in he ending and some of the endng i wrote
cagedmind0531
I am trying to take half of each of what we want to make an ending
You will see some of your ending but not all of it. That wouldn't be fair to me. I plan to write in alot of what you wrote out before. I was thinking maybe Siren playing chess with the bird or something
forrestjones2010
i understand
we have far to go befor we get there
it will come
cagedmind0531
Yeah I am just starting it because I need something to work on when I can't write sequentially
Maybe it will help me
forrestjones2010
k
br b food
k
i am going to rest for a little whil
Tuesday, April 20, 2010
Friday, April 16, 2010
convo 4.15.10 with jason
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cagedmind0531
I'm here
forrestjones2010
k computer acting funny
cagedmind0531
That sucks
forrestjones2010
i am good now
cagedmind0531
So what's been kickin
You there? I have an idea for the end of the book. I dreamed it.
forrestjones2010
here
go
cagedmind0531
Ok so Graven wakes up after some event to find himself in white surroundings with blinding light. His only refuge from the light is a mercurial door. He opens it.
Inside the door is a rather large room, similar to a hunting log cabin lodge. One each wall is a mask and on the walls are portrayals of events all throughout history.
In the corner a humanoid crow sits in a large lounge chair near a crackling fire with his feet sitting up. Graven takes in the room before noticing a book stand in the corner of the room.
He proceeds to the book stand and places[instinctively] the book upon it. Slowly it begins to animate, flipping through the pages quickly and efficiently.
forrestjones2010
i will be in and out...but keep going
cagedmind0531
All I got so far
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
I just picture the end of time as this big hunting lodge where each masks showcase their best work along each wall.
The crow sits in the corner comfortable and content with their competition. Kind of mocking it.
Just ideas.
forrestjones2010
k...
still in and out
cagedmind0531
opinions when you get a chance
forrestjones2010
will do...still in and out
cagedmind0531
What time will you be free?
forrestjones2010
in about 15 minutes
cagedmind0531
k
word up
forrestjones2010
sup
making it rain man
rain
cagedmind0531
You available yet?
forrestjones2010
not yet...still makin it rain...
cagedmind0531
Well I am going to take a nap then I guess. I didn't sleep well last night. I'll message you when I get up.
When I wake up we'll get some work done if you're free.
I think I may need you to finish this chapter. I am really stuck on it. We'll discuss it tonight.
forrestjones2010
k
k
morning
cagedmind0531
What's up
forrestjones2010
sup?
things are a little slower today
yesterday was hairy
you there?
cagedmind0531
here
Yeah I waited for quite a while yesterday then gave up. Figured you were busy or something
What time will you be free today?
forrestjones2010
i am here
cagedmind0531
So what did you think of the lodge idea from yesterday?
forrestjones2010
let me read it now
yesterday didnt end for me until 11pm
my brother is going through a divorce
and needed a friend last night
cagedmind0531
It's cool I understand
be right back in 5 minutes. mom is calling for something
forrestjones2010
i like
the ending
i finally figured out the tripple crossover that wont effect the integrity of The Ind
triple
cagedmind0531
What do you mean crossover? elaborate
forrestjones2010
k
The Ind is a creation story right?
so distant past
you know how different cultures through out time call things by different names but they are actually the same thing?
cagedmind0531
yes
go on
?
forrestjones2010
sorry
teresa needed me for a sec
one thing i had to do in my mind before i moved forward was reconcile Billy The Ind and Phillip Solomon
cagedmind0531
np
forrestjones2010
with out
effecting the integrity of The Ind
we wont be writing about any of the crossover points
I just had to set it up in my mind such that the infrastructure was in place for the future
if that makes sense
cagedmind0531
kinda lost as to what you are talking about. I get crossovers and all that but where are you headed
forrestjones2010
it involves The Soliton
The Chrome
Billy Purgatory
and Phillip Solomon
theses are all things that cast no variance for what we are doing now
i just needed to sort it out in my head
back up for a moment
cagedmind0531
ok
forrestjones2010
the different cultures identify in the past present and future different things
Phillip Solomon is a God like character
an evil God
cagedmind0531
Not in this book though
forrestjones2010
keep in mind we wont write this
right
it really doesnt have to be talked about here if you want to get back on track
its just a piece i had to write for the future universe writings to mke sense
*make
cagedmind0531
Kind of need to discuss what to do about me being stuck. I can't write this chapter anymore.
I've tried and tried and tried
I don't know if it's just this chapter or if I've lost my touch or whatever but something needs to be done.
lose ya?
forrestjones2010
ok where are you stuck
jason you will never loos your touch
loose
cagedmind0531
Preparations for stopping Iboga were well underway. The idea of him taking another life, or for that matter getting anywhere near the Gaia tree repulsed not only Graven, but the entire populace. They worked together making sure the traps were secure and the nets were competent and unforgiving. However nothing could prepare them for the arrival of the golem. The ground quaked and trees split as he entered the forest intent upon his goal of paradise to enter where he was not welcome, the afterlife of the Gaiasphere.
He stomped and he stormed in the thirty foot monstrosity lined with runes and all manner of pumps and gears. They grinded, screamed and screeched as he approached and Axium's nets seemed but humble strings snapped on his path to ascendancy. The first set of traps were utterly useless. There was no way they could have predicted the monster to be so gargantuan and powerful. Once he entered the city Iboga ignored all impediments.
That's all I can get
I can't get past that
forrestjones2010
wow
cagedmind0531
I just don't know where to go with it
Or what to do with it
forrestjones2010
ok...let me process
where are we by chapter
and page?
cagedmind0531
This will be the end of the chapter....I think
page 180ish
This could be the end of the chapter but more then likely need something else.
forrestjones2010
k
what chapter/
?
cagedmind0531
10
forrestjones2010
k
and it is toward the end already right?
cagedmind0531
Yeah more or less
forrestjones2010
what is Iboga's goal other than general destruction
cagedmind0531
He wants his spirit to enter the sphere
I guess. That can change.
Could just scrap it all. Nothing I have wrote lately has been worth it to me
forrestjones2010
hmmm
the writing itself is Hawt
we can find the direction
does he succeed?
in entering?
cagedmind0531
He succeeds in drilling a hole in the sphere
But he still can't enter I guess
forrestjones2010
where is our hero and what is he doing/she
cagedmind0531
Hero is here thinking of how to stop Iboga. Coordinating traps etc
I figured he could succeed but then the tree would strike back at him and throw him into the pit of wax
or something
forrestjones2010
thinking
who needs to become more 3d?
Kaylyx?
cagedmind0531
Kalyx
yes
forrestjones2010
lets have her shine with a big role to defeat Iboga
it would get him dead and work her in as a powerful figure
cagedmind0531
Yeah I can agree with that but I still don't know where to go with it.
Plus I have to consider how this affects the future. The machine is going to be something Asimov is interested in.
There?
forrestjones2010
yes
had to take a call
cagedmind0531
ok
forrestjones2010
brb
back
gotta run...appointment for work...fj
back
you there>
?
cagedmind0531
I'm here
forrestjones2010
Siren's origin is a place called Hunab Ku
i have been working on that too
cagedmind0531
ok
forrestjones2010
i have been working in analog lately
journals
Hunab Ku is the black whole at the center of a spiral Galaxy
how are you?
cagedmind0531
I'd be better if I were writing more but I'm not
forrestjones2010
you are doing great jason
really
perhaps the pasue is needed to process
cagedmind0531
I have been totally stumped man. I know thinking positive and all that is supposed to help but it hasn't
forrestjones2010
ok
whatever gets you by
cagedmind0531
I'm trying to be less negative
I really am
forrestjones2010
dharma
i accept you how you are
right now
today
my friend Jason
the badass writer
cagedmind0531
You going to be online tonight?
forrestjones2010
yes
cagedmind0531
What time is good?
forrestjones2010
you?
cagedmind0531
Yeah I'm going to nap a while but I'll be on all night if you can be
forrestjones2010
yeah...i will coffee up
i was on at 2 this morning
cagedmind0531
What time? 9-10?
forrestjones2010
yes and maybe earlier
cagedmind0531
Ok I'm gonna nap and I'll be on later. Message you then
forrestjones2010
k
sup?
cagedmind0531
Just woke up
forrestjones2010
all appointments...done
Coral's Death Print is the blue print for The Artifact right?
cagedmind0531
yes
forrestjones2010
k
I have started making the artifact...its an interactive puzzle with moving parts...
cagedmind0531
That's interesting
forrestjones2010
i am using your picture as my blueprint...will post pictures as i progress
cagedmind0531
ok
forrestjones2010
how ya feelin?
cagedmind0531
Ok I guess.
forrestjones2010
good
cagedmind0531
I think I found an angle....maybe
forrestjones2010
sweet...whatcha got?
cagedmind0531
"Our only solution is the ramp. We must defeat him on the ramp and see sure to encase him in the wax," Adahn exclaimed emphatically.
A ramp had been designed in order to delineate the exact route that Iboga would take to get up to the tree so the traps would assuredly be triggered. Along the route a large log had been counterbalanced to carry a large cauldron of wax kept above an open flame. The counterweighted log could easily direct the wax to the series of pits dug beneath the ramp where Iboga's golem and spirit were intended to be entombed.
"We could collapse the ramp upon him to send him tumbling to the pits but the wax will have to be on call immediately." Graven surmised.
"I can try to call upon Gaia's natural defenses. The tree is more then capable of dealing with threats to it's safety, however Iboga has entuned the resonance of his machine so that Gaia will not sense the threat till it's too late. She must be warned somehow..." Kalyx continued to seek an answer.
"Let us focus on the pits Kalyx. I do not believe we are capable of communicating with Gaia directly, I have tried for many years in vane." Graven rebuttled.
"We don't need to communicate father, simply warn her. Send her the intent of danger and surely she will react."
"Enough. We don't have time for whimsy. Even if she did react the tree could endanger all of us, we have no idea what it is capable of."
"Graven, it's Gaia. She's still there. I can sense her."
"The tree consumed your mother, we can't risk it doing the same. I am in wonder at the tree as well everyone else but it is too dangerous."
"But father.."
"No, I will not allow you to call upon Gaia. She has done enough and it is her time to rest and ours to act. We must stand united on this Kalyx."
"Very well father, we will focus on the ramp."
I'll give you a sec to read that while I get some food
What do ya think?
I'll be right back then. Gonna get a pizza.
forrestjones2010
i read it
direction is good
it furthers establishment of Kaylx and introduces family conflict
rock
headed home be back online then
coffee up
cagedmind0531
word up g
forrestjones2010
its been a good day
cagedmind0531
That's good. How's that?
forrestjones2010
business wise my work is fun again
and now i get to write
cagedmind0531
That's good
So what's kickin sir
forrestjones2010
relaxing and thinking about iboga wax
cagedmind0531
We could totally sell it as surfboard wax
forrestjones2010
sounds marketable
cagedmind0531
Iboga, for when you wanna hit the wave back!
lol
forrestjones2010
helz yes
cagedmind0531
So...
What if
Iboga decides to tunnel under the tree instead of assaulting it directly
Then Kalyx decides to call on Gaia and when she does Gaia collapses the pit into the warrens and it traps Iboga...or something
forrestjones2010
then they all realize together that Gaia IS sentient or respondent
cagedmind0531
Not sure the repurcussions of that.
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
So anywho
forrestjones2010
right
cagedmind0531
So about the lodge idea
We never really talked about it
forrestjones2010
its got potential but i thought you were against that type of ending a while back
i presnted something similar and you gave it a no go
cagedmind0531
No the reason I brought it up is because it incorporates alot of your ideas from before
It's very similar to what you suggested with some grounding changes
forrestjones2010
it seemed familiar
i think it has good direction and can work
cagedmind0531
Ok so chapter 11
is almost here
What are we doing for 11
forrestjones2010
ah a new chapter
we probably need to go back and look at an older outline
just as a gauge
in earnst i believe i need to reread from beginning to present
cagedmind0531
yeah I was afraid you'd say that
forrestjones2010
is that bad?
have you done the reread yet?
cagedmind0531
I just like to keep pushing forward but I see your point.
No I haven't yet.
forrestjones2010
it was just a thought
not necessary if you dont want to
cagedmind0531
I'm going to need to print it out. It's too annoying to try to read it on the computer.
So we can for sure get this going again now I think. Finally
forrestjones2010
indeed
i really just had to get that crossover thing straight in my head and get caught up on Billy
i am clear now
just need to reacclimate and start rolling
cagedmind0531
That'
That's good news
forrestjones2010
yeah i am totally clear
meds are on point
relationship is good
work is good
and corporation is going pretty good
i am on full go...sorry if i layed out to long
cagedmind0531
It's ok
So because of Iboga they learn about warrens that exist beneath the tree
forrestjones2010
i apologize if that frustrated you
cagedmind0531
no worries
forrestjones2010
so 11...i want to look back at the blog for an outline
has Graven been a leader in ch 10?
i keep thinking quest
cagedmind0531
No not really. I don't think so. He's trying to reassert himself a bit at the end of 10
forrestjones2010
and i want siren to show a lighter side i need to go back and finish some things too
i want the artifact to show up
claim its position
the scalping
just processing
cagedmind0531
k
So we really need to figure out how much more space we have to cover before we can start writing the ending.
forrestjones2010
yes...what are the high points...what has not been done
or said
about the universe
that must be said
cagedmind0531
First off we need to figure out where Asimov starts and initially learns about the artifact and how to create it.
Is he programmed with the info or...
forrestjones2010
i feel as if Iboga ends the creation
and we go into a "present" time
and then a future setting
ah
cagedmind0531
The present will become the future later, that is only temperary
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
That sounded kind of paradoxical
lol
forrestjones2010
lol
cagedmind0531
We should have that on the front of the book
The past will become the future later
lol
forrestjones2010
he he
cagedmind0531
So what's the plan Stan
forrestjones2010
thinking
scene and time shift after iboga's second death
what are the Large arcs?
cagedmind0531
hmmm good question
forrestjones2010
how many do we have left?
cagedmind0531
Um
I'm thinking
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
we need origins for almost all the characters
Asimov, Graven, Siren
forrestjones2010
true
thats a substantial amount of work in itself
cagedmind0531
Graven may not really need an origin because he wasn't really anything special till the eye came
forrestjones2010
i dreamed of the spike last night
i held it in my hand
and a version of the Artifact a mini version
cagedmind0531
Not really sure what arcs are left honestly. Maybe I need to reread some stuff myself
forrestjones2010
we nailed it one day in an outline format i am looking for that
cagedmind0531
Kalyx needs to be developed. We need to get to the end of Gaia's time which explains the beginning of the AI's time
forrestjones2010
agreed...this is paramount
cagedmind0531
So what even signifies the end of Gaias time
The real cultural death of Gaia
That causes people to forget her
*event
That even will end the second set of chapters and lead us into the third I think
event*
forrestjones2010
it can be ended by a non event
such as apathy
people just moved on
quit worshipping
cagedmind0531
moved on past god?
forrestjones2010
quit caring
yes
cagedmind0531
hmmm
forrestjones2010
just a thought
people sometimes get tired of him/her not showing up and just move on
like f this gaia stuff...skank never did anything for me
cagedmind0531
They could realize that the reality is that Gaia has no control of their lives, her only place is for their spirits
forrestjones2010
that works
cagedmind0531
where as technology has instant gratification
forrestjones2010
enter a new machine
cagedmind0531
That could do it.
forrestjones2010
lets do it...sonds solid
sounds
cagedmind0531
Is chapter 11 the place to end the era? that leaves the rest of the book to deal with the end already
forrestjones2010
i believe so...the first era feels done to me
cagedmind0531
Yeah, we can add stuff here and there but it seems to me the real 'happenings' are gonna be in the future
forrestjones2010
thats the feel i get...
the 2nd drft of the first part will be allot of stylizing...
but the events are nailed solid
cagedmind0531
This has been productive so far
http://the-ind.blogspot.com/2010/02/ind-overall-story-arc-february-112010.html
Is that what you were looking for?
I'm gonna get off the computer a bit. I'll be back on later. This was productive. Got alot sorted out. I need to think on it.
forrestjones2010
sorry
my brother just found out his wife is seeing someone else
had to take his call he is in allot of pain
i will brb...give me 15 or so
cagedmind0531
oh my god
forrestjones2010
no shit
this world is fo fucked up
brb
cagedmind0531
please take your time. I'll be back in a bit
forrestjones2010
k
ty
back
cagedmind0531
Is he ok?
forrestjones2010
he is in shock
cagedmind0531
How did he find out?
forrestjones2010
facebook...how 14 is that?
cagedmind0531
wow
seriously?
forrestjones2010
yep
i wish i could say i cant believe it
but nothing is shocking anymore
cagedmind0531
Is he getting a divorce?
Did he confront her?
forrestjones2010
yes and yes
cagedmind0531
wow
forrestjones2010
they hve both filed i think
cagedmind0531
geez
Was there any signs?
forrestjones2010
wrong one
cagedmind0531
lol
forrestjones2010
anyway...refocus
i have a new Siren pic
posting
posted
brb
cagedmind0531
k
forrestjones2010
i am going to rest
night if i dont see you later
ON
i thought about the ending...Love it
just a little distracted last night
rock
cagedmind0531
really?
that's cool
I figure it blends both our ideas together
forrestjones2010
it totally works
i likes
The forest was thick dark and green with the aromas and musks of all kinds
filling the airs at every turn until Amisov walked into a clearing.
Axis spoke to her softly, "Let us not disturb them just yet and see who is the wiser."
Asimov was usually a willing participant to his silly games an compiled with
relative ease.
They peered into a 15 foot circular clearing where the four great masks had
been discovered by Graven and the nobles long ago. They where immaculate in
their construction and rivaled the very artistry of the Gaisphere(insert more
description of the masks in the clearing here). Two large figures sat stoic in great concentration dressed in full deep forest cool teperature regalia; heavy coats, sweaters large draping(wizard) head ware so as one could not ea
could not easily make out their faces.
Their body movement suggested that of old friends...
cagedmind0531
Yeah I've read it before I believe
forrestjones2010
i need to post this to site i think...its a possible ending i wrote a few weeks ago
ok
good
i reposted just in case
did you see the new siren sketch
in red?
cagedmind0531
Yeah I did
Loooks pretty strange
forrestjones2010
par for the course i suppose
be out for a bit...fj
back
morning
there?
cagedmind0531
I'm here now
forrestjones2010
me too!
and i am not that busy
cagedmind0531
How goes things? Talk to your brother?
forrestjones2010
yeah...he has good days and bad days
thanks for asking
cagedmind0531
Of course. I met him once or twice didn't I?
forrestjones2010
yeah...hurricane i think
cagedmind0531
Ah ok, not my finest hour
So anyway how goes work?
forrestjones2010
awesome
last day of tax season
i can breathe again
cagedmind0531
haha that's good
forrestjones2010
i am soaking the wood that will be the gaiasphere
today i carve
and sculpt
cagedmind0531
That sounds fun
forrestjones2010
what re you up to?
cagedmind0531
Nothing really. Just woke up.
forrestjones2010
sweet
cagedmind0531
So Beth will be over around 11 tonight. Other then that I am free to work whenever, so just give me a heads up
forrestjones2010
i can work from now until whenever
cagedmind0531
Ok so we need to hammer out chapter 11
forrestjones2010
lets roll
cagedmind0531
So let's say that they just defeated Iboga and trapped him in wax. That and Asimov just opened the vault. That's where we are more/less.
There?
forrestjones2010
brb
sorry
call came in
cagedmind0531
It's fine
Let me know whenever you're ready no rush. I'll be playing a game
forrestjones2010
k
back
cagedmind0531
k\
give me a sec, need a sandwich
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
so anyway
now what
forrestjones2010
ch 11
this is what i was thinking
corals death
is the end of the age
which gives birth in the form of the artifact to the new age
cagedmind0531
The age just started
ages last like 1000 years
forrestjones2010
?
cagedmind0531
We had the runic era, now it's the gaia era which lasts a long time till people fall from it and into the tech era
forrestjones2010
ok
semantics
age was the wrong word
so the era is over and tech starts with the artifact
cagedmind0531
I was thinking the tech era starts as people wane from Gaia and Syrka invents the AI sometime late in the era
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
The trick is how to show that several hundred years have passed before the era ends
forrestjones2010
indeed
that is a feat
cagedmind0531
ok so we need to figure out what happens after Iboga is delt with and after Asimov opens the vault
forrestjones2010
refresh me on asimov and the vault
cagedmind0531
Asimov brings Syrka in to interrogate him on how to open the vault. Syrka reveals he is Asimov's creator. Syrka also let's on that he is to open the vault of his own free will because he knows it's necessary for the last stage of the IND[the book] to be completed.
forrestjones2010
k ty
cagedmind0531
Then Syrka kills himself before Asimov can interrogate/torture him
I imagine that Syrka was just finishing the second part of the book just as he got captured. That would make sense
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
Ya with me or are things hazy?
forrestjones2010
with ya
cagedmind0531
So now it is revealed what the vault contains and what Coral's deathprint actually was.
And from there I don't know
forrestjones2010
deathprint=atifact blueprint
cagedmind0531
yeah
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
So we should probably flash back at this point to when Asimov first started seeking his immortality
I imagine it was created, then it began to observe itself and man and realized that at the rate man was going it would destroy itself leaving all the computers to rot, thus ending the AI's 'life'.
So it begins to research. It finds the history of the Gaiasphere and the book changes it's proverbial life.
forrestjones2010
processing
the book meaning The Ind changes its life?
cagedmind0531
No, just some random book about the history of the Gaiasphere. How it was the advent of souls etc
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
so half the chapter is a flash back to when Syrka created the AI etc, what's the other half
or is it a 1/3 of the chapter and the other 2/3's can be about siren and or Graven/Kalyx
forrestjones2010
1/3 syrka
2/3 graven/kaylx against something
to unite them against something
perhaps against siren
cagedmind0531
So one route we can go is that iboga damages the Gaia tree and it needs to repaired or something
forrestjones2010
we could have a group repairing
while graven/kaylyx unite quest against siren
what if siren takes part of iboga
as he is destroyed
she is a weapons collector
not a major part of him
cagedmind0531
We haven't really established her as a weapons collector. Are you going to do that or...?
forrestjones2010
just something that she thinks she can use
eventually she will need to be established as such
it fits in with her merc status
quasi merc status
cagedmind0531
Well she can be if that's what you want but storywise there isn't a need for it. Just saying
We could have her stealing a part of Iboga for Asimov
forrestjones2010
it is part of her core modus in the chrome
gatherer of talent and weapons
and yes for AI is fine
she collects for various reasons
not always to hoard
cagedmind0531
We'll need to go back and do some rewriting in order to make her want weapons. Cause if we go that direction I don't want it to be half way
forrestjones2010
thats fine
i can handle that
its just a nuance
doenst effect core story
just a curtain in a room
brb bathroom
cagedmind0531
What if Kalyx eventually appeals to Gaia's defenses and it backfires or something. Causes the tree to become tainted or something.
forrestjones2010
thinking
cagedmind0531
One problem we have with the book is that the earth doesn't seem big and populated
It feels small and secluded
forrestjones2010
it does...
cagedmind0531
That needs to be fixed
We need to add a wide world...somehow
forrestjones2010
future?
cagedmind0531
We could but I feel some of it has to come from the past
forrestjones2010
k
hit it from both angles or times
cagedmind0531
Yes
Do we need to create another sister or something?
sister city
I mean
forrestjones2010
perhaps
and reference lots of extended characters
large families
cagedmind0531
What if we create a character from somewhere else
forrestjones2010
that could work too
cagedmind0531
Like a pilgrim who comes to visit the Gaia tree
From far away
forrestjones2010
i like that
cagedmind0531
names?
forrestjones2010
Rutherford Cane
cagedmind0531
No to Cane. I feel it's overused
forrestjones2010
Arcane
cagedmind0531
hmmm
forrestjones2010
Black Zen
lol
cagedmind0531
lol
forrestjones2010
Rocky Balboa
cagedmind0531
You know he wrote rocky in like 2 days
forrestjones2010
i know
cagedmind0531
rediculous
forrestjones2010
yo adriane
punc punch
grunt grunt
he cant write no dang gaisphere
cagedmind0531
ebaneizar
forrestjones2010
yes
dig
cagedmind0531
scrooge!
forrestjones2010
less the scrooge
cagedmind0531
lol
forrestjones2010
Eben Azar
cagedmind0531
That works, sounds exotic
forrestjones2010
lol
do any of our characters have last names
Graven Hodges?
Sirend Davis
cagedmind0531
No they don't. That's easy to add later though
forrestjones2010
i just thought about that the other day
Sorenson
Son of Soren
cagedmind0531
Eben Azar Trenchgoat
forrestjones2010
i like Trenchgoats
cagedmind0531
I thought you might
forrestjones2010
he he
cagedmind0531
Sounds very sophisticated
This world being too small thing is a serious problem
It's going to take alot of work to correct it
What if
Graven holds a summit or something
Of all the elders from all the tribes
forrestjones2010
it can be nuanced in an rewrite 2
cagedmind0531
What do you think about the summit?
forrestjones2010
summit works
cagedmind0531
To discuss a problem? or...
forrestjones2010
iboga
gaiasphere
direction of the world/cities
trade
cagedmind0531
WHAT IF!
forrestjones2010
crime
cagedmind0531
Gaia had a seed, the first one ever. They are deciding whom should get it. We could even make a war over it if we felt like it
forrestjones2010
i like war
cagedmind0531
So this works? A summit over what to do with the seed?
forrestjones2010
yes
so what does the seed do
cagedmind0531
We really need to discuss other factions possibly and other interests.
forrestjones2010
what does it grow into
cagedmind0531
Another tree, another spirit vessel
forrestjones2010
rock
siren can introduce some more of her kind
peyton
cagedmind0531
You realize with this added on it's gonna be another 10-20 pages of rewrites and additions
forrestjones2010
yes
i am not in a hurry are you?
cagedmind0531
Nope.
forrestjones2010
i was at first
not anymore
i want this to be amazing
cagedmind0531
It's just intimidating to go back and try to insert stuff like this
forrestjones2010
tell you what
since you like to go forward
go forward
create a document of what has to be added
and i can focus on that
i dont mind rewrite or addition
we will probably disagree less this way
and it will help to ground my end
cagedmind0531
Mainly we just need some outside world introduced somehow
Other clans. They don't have to be that different
forrestjones2010
i think i get what you mean and need
cagedmind0531
But maybe representatives from those clans show up to discuss the changes happening once the Gaia tree is born.
forrestjones2010
nothing bizare just fill up the joint with life
cagedmind0531
and yes
forrestjones2010
right i am on board
cagedmind0531
It can be as simple as referencing another city
sometimes
forrestjones2010
what if i start the first rewrite/edit and begin to add life
right
cagedmind0531
that sounds good
forrestjones2010
thats what i will do
cagedmind0531
Do you need me to mail youu the master document?
forrestjones2010
i will help you get unstuck if it happens and begin to edit/fill /rewrite
yeah go ahead
cagedmind0531
sent
forrestjones2010
sweet
as always i will add names as place holders for cities and people
they can be changed whenever
cagedmind0531
When we're done this will put us over 200 pages easily.
forrestjones2010
wowsers
have we discussed planets and the sun
cagedmind0531
Not really
forrestjones2010
or sciences
k
sun worshippers
religions outside of gaia worship
we need to have a group who thinks gaia is not the way to go
dissenters
cagedmind0531
True. That's something big we need to pan out
forrestjones2010
just for variety and clash
cagedmind0531
Rune worship maybe
forrestjones2010
rune worship
sun worship
iboga worship
The Necantors worship ibogas darkness
or something
they try to become demons and cut themselves
and dance and chant and slay
cagedmind0531
Maybe Iboga was worship was common and now that he's a spirit it's been elevated
forrestjones2010
i like
saint iboganovana
jj
cagedmind0531
It doesn't sound that bad lol
gonna lay down a bit, lot to think about now
I'll be on later
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
this is falling into place now
If we can pull off all the stuff we discussed
He or she will receive your messages after signing in.
cagedmind0531
I'm here
forrestjones2010
k computer acting funny
cagedmind0531
That sucks
forrestjones2010
i am good now
cagedmind0531
So what's been kickin
You there? I have an idea for the end of the book. I dreamed it.
forrestjones2010
here
go
cagedmind0531
Ok so Graven wakes up after some event to find himself in white surroundings with blinding light. His only refuge from the light is a mercurial door. He opens it.
Inside the door is a rather large room, similar to a hunting log cabin lodge. One each wall is a mask and on the walls are portrayals of events all throughout history.
In the corner a humanoid crow sits in a large lounge chair near a crackling fire with his feet sitting up. Graven takes in the room before noticing a book stand in the corner of the room.
He proceeds to the book stand and places[instinctively] the book upon it. Slowly it begins to animate, flipping through the pages quickly and efficiently.
forrestjones2010
i will be in and out...but keep going
cagedmind0531
All I got so far
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
I just picture the end of time as this big hunting lodge where each masks showcase their best work along each wall.
The crow sits in the corner comfortable and content with their competition. Kind of mocking it.
Just ideas.
forrestjones2010
k...
still in and out
cagedmind0531
opinions when you get a chance
forrestjones2010
will do...still in and out
cagedmind0531
What time will you be free?
forrestjones2010
in about 15 minutes
cagedmind0531
k
word up
forrestjones2010
sup
making it rain man
rain
cagedmind0531
You available yet?
forrestjones2010
not yet...still makin it rain...
cagedmind0531
Well I am going to take a nap then I guess. I didn't sleep well last night. I'll message you when I get up.
When I wake up we'll get some work done if you're free.
I think I may need you to finish this chapter. I am really stuck on it. We'll discuss it tonight.
forrestjones2010
k
k
morning
cagedmind0531
What's up
forrestjones2010
sup?
things are a little slower today
yesterday was hairy
you there?
cagedmind0531
here
Yeah I waited for quite a while yesterday then gave up. Figured you were busy or something
What time will you be free today?
forrestjones2010
i am here
cagedmind0531
So what did you think of the lodge idea from yesterday?
forrestjones2010
let me read it now
yesterday didnt end for me until 11pm
my brother is going through a divorce
and needed a friend last night
cagedmind0531
It's cool I understand
be right back in 5 minutes. mom is calling for something
forrestjones2010
i like
the ending
i finally figured out the tripple crossover that wont effect the integrity of The Ind
triple
cagedmind0531
What do you mean crossover? elaborate
forrestjones2010
k
The Ind is a creation story right?
so distant past
you know how different cultures through out time call things by different names but they are actually the same thing?
cagedmind0531
yes
go on
?
forrestjones2010
sorry
teresa needed me for a sec
one thing i had to do in my mind before i moved forward was reconcile Billy The Ind and Phillip Solomon
cagedmind0531
np
forrestjones2010
with out
effecting the integrity of The Ind
we wont be writing about any of the crossover points
I just had to set it up in my mind such that the infrastructure was in place for the future
if that makes sense
cagedmind0531
kinda lost as to what you are talking about. I get crossovers and all that but where are you headed
forrestjones2010
it involves The Soliton
The Chrome
Billy Purgatory
and Phillip Solomon
theses are all things that cast no variance for what we are doing now
i just needed to sort it out in my head
back up for a moment
cagedmind0531
ok
forrestjones2010
the different cultures identify in the past present and future different things
Phillip Solomon is a God like character
an evil God
cagedmind0531
Not in this book though
forrestjones2010
keep in mind we wont write this
right
it really doesnt have to be talked about here if you want to get back on track
its just a piece i had to write for the future universe writings to mke sense
*make
cagedmind0531
Kind of need to discuss what to do about me being stuck. I can't write this chapter anymore.
I've tried and tried and tried
I don't know if it's just this chapter or if I've lost my touch or whatever but something needs to be done.
lose ya?
forrestjones2010
ok where are you stuck
jason you will never loos your touch
loose
cagedmind0531
Preparations for stopping Iboga were well underway. The idea of him taking another life, or for that matter getting anywhere near the Gaia tree repulsed not only Graven, but the entire populace. They worked together making sure the traps were secure and the nets were competent and unforgiving. However nothing could prepare them for the arrival of the golem. The ground quaked and trees split as he entered the forest intent upon his goal of paradise to enter where he was not welcome, the afterlife of the Gaiasphere.
He stomped and he stormed in the thirty foot monstrosity lined with runes and all manner of pumps and gears. They grinded, screamed and screeched as he approached and Axium's nets seemed but humble strings snapped on his path to ascendancy. The first set of traps were utterly useless. There was no way they could have predicted the monster to be so gargantuan and powerful. Once he entered the city Iboga ignored all impediments.
That's all I can get
I can't get past that
forrestjones2010
wow
cagedmind0531
I just don't know where to go with it
Or what to do with it
forrestjones2010
ok...let me process
where are we by chapter
and page?
cagedmind0531
This will be the end of the chapter....I think
page 180ish
This could be the end of the chapter but more then likely need something else.
forrestjones2010
k
what chapter/
?
cagedmind0531
10
forrestjones2010
k
and it is toward the end already right?
cagedmind0531
Yeah more or less
forrestjones2010
what is Iboga's goal other than general destruction
cagedmind0531
He wants his spirit to enter the sphere
I guess. That can change.
Could just scrap it all. Nothing I have wrote lately has been worth it to me
forrestjones2010
hmmm
the writing itself is Hawt
we can find the direction
does he succeed?
in entering?
cagedmind0531
He succeeds in drilling a hole in the sphere
But he still can't enter I guess
forrestjones2010
where is our hero and what is he doing/she
cagedmind0531
Hero is here thinking of how to stop Iboga. Coordinating traps etc
I figured he could succeed but then the tree would strike back at him and throw him into the pit of wax
or something
forrestjones2010
thinking
who needs to become more 3d?
Kaylyx?
cagedmind0531
Kalyx
yes
forrestjones2010
lets have her shine with a big role to defeat Iboga
it would get him dead and work her in as a powerful figure
cagedmind0531
Yeah I can agree with that but I still don't know where to go with it.
Plus I have to consider how this affects the future. The machine is going to be something Asimov is interested in.
There?
forrestjones2010
yes
had to take a call
cagedmind0531
ok
forrestjones2010
brb
back
gotta run...appointment for work...fj
back
you there>
?
cagedmind0531
I'm here
forrestjones2010
Siren's origin is a place called Hunab Ku
i have been working on that too
cagedmind0531
ok
forrestjones2010
i have been working in analog lately
journals
Hunab Ku is the black whole at the center of a spiral Galaxy
how are you?
cagedmind0531
I'd be better if I were writing more but I'm not
forrestjones2010
you are doing great jason
really
perhaps the pasue is needed to process
cagedmind0531
I have been totally stumped man. I know thinking positive and all that is supposed to help but it hasn't
forrestjones2010
ok
whatever gets you by
cagedmind0531
I'm trying to be less negative
I really am
forrestjones2010
dharma
i accept you how you are
right now
today
my friend Jason
the badass writer
cagedmind0531
You going to be online tonight?
forrestjones2010
yes
cagedmind0531
What time is good?
forrestjones2010
you?
cagedmind0531
Yeah I'm going to nap a while but I'll be on all night if you can be
forrestjones2010
yeah...i will coffee up
i was on at 2 this morning
cagedmind0531
What time? 9-10?
forrestjones2010
yes and maybe earlier
cagedmind0531
Ok I'm gonna nap and I'll be on later. Message you then
forrestjones2010
k
sup?
cagedmind0531
Just woke up
forrestjones2010
all appointments...done
Coral's Death Print is the blue print for The Artifact right?
cagedmind0531
yes
forrestjones2010
k
I have started making the artifact...its an interactive puzzle with moving parts...
cagedmind0531
That's interesting
forrestjones2010
i am using your picture as my blueprint...will post pictures as i progress
cagedmind0531
ok
forrestjones2010
how ya feelin?
cagedmind0531
Ok I guess.
forrestjones2010
good
cagedmind0531
I think I found an angle....maybe
forrestjones2010
sweet...whatcha got?
cagedmind0531
"Our only solution is the ramp. We must defeat him on the ramp and see sure to encase him in the wax," Adahn exclaimed emphatically.
A ramp had been designed in order to delineate the exact route that Iboga would take to get up to the tree so the traps would assuredly be triggered. Along the route a large log had been counterbalanced to carry a large cauldron of wax kept above an open flame. The counterweighted log could easily direct the wax to the series of pits dug beneath the ramp where Iboga's golem and spirit were intended to be entombed.
"We could collapse the ramp upon him to send him tumbling to the pits but the wax will have to be on call immediately." Graven surmised.
"I can try to call upon Gaia's natural defenses. The tree is more then capable of dealing with threats to it's safety, however Iboga has entuned the resonance of his machine so that Gaia will not sense the threat till it's too late. She must be warned somehow..." Kalyx continued to seek an answer.
"Let us focus on the pits Kalyx. I do not believe we are capable of communicating with Gaia directly, I have tried for many years in vane." Graven rebuttled.
"We don't need to communicate father, simply warn her. Send her the intent of danger and surely she will react."
"Enough. We don't have time for whimsy. Even if she did react the tree could endanger all of us, we have no idea what it is capable of."
"Graven, it's Gaia. She's still there. I can sense her."
"The tree consumed your mother, we can't risk it doing the same. I am in wonder at the tree as well everyone else but it is too dangerous."
"But father.."
"No, I will not allow you to call upon Gaia. She has done enough and it is her time to rest and ours to act. We must stand united on this Kalyx."
"Very well father, we will focus on the ramp."
I'll give you a sec to read that while I get some food
What do ya think?
I'll be right back then. Gonna get a pizza.
forrestjones2010
i read it
direction is good
it furthers establishment of Kaylx and introduces family conflict
rock
headed home be back online then
coffee up
cagedmind0531
word up g
forrestjones2010
its been a good day
cagedmind0531
That's good. How's that?
forrestjones2010
business wise my work is fun again
and now i get to write
cagedmind0531
That's good
So what's kickin sir
forrestjones2010
relaxing and thinking about iboga wax
cagedmind0531
We could totally sell it as surfboard wax
forrestjones2010
sounds marketable
cagedmind0531
Iboga, for when you wanna hit the wave back!
lol
forrestjones2010
helz yes
cagedmind0531
So...
What if
Iboga decides to tunnel under the tree instead of assaulting it directly
Then Kalyx decides to call on Gaia and when she does Gaia collapses the pit into the warrens and it traps Iboga...or something
forrestjones2010
then they all realize together that Gaia IS sentient or respondent
cagedmind0531
Not sure the repurcussions of that.
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
So anywho
forrestjones2010
right
cagedmind0531
So about the lodge idea
We never really talked about it
forrestjones2010
its got potential but i thought you were against that type of ending a while back
i presnted something similar and you gave it a no go
cagedmind0531
No the reason I brought it up is because it incorporates alot of your ideas from before
It's very similar to what you suggested with some grounding changes
forrestjones2010
it seemed familiar
i think it has good direction and can work
cagedmind0531
Ok so chapter 11
is almost here
What are we doing for 11
forrestjones2010
ah a new chapter
we probably need to go back and look at an older outline
just as a gauge
in earnst i believe i need to reread from beginning to present
cagedmind0531
yeah I was afraid you'd say that
forrestjones2010
is that bad?
have you done the reread yet?
cagedmind0531
I just like to keep pushing forward but I see your point.
No I haven't yet.
forrestjones2010
it was just a thought
not necessary if you dont want to
cagedmind0531
I'm going to need to print it out. It's too annoying to try to read it on the computer.
So we can for sure get this going again now I think. Finally
forrestjones2010
indeed
i really just had to get that crossover thing straight in my head and get caught up on Billy
i am clear now
just need to reacclimate and start rolling
cagedmind0531
That'
That's good news
forrestjones2010
yeah i am totally clear
meds are on point
relationship is good
work is good
and corporation is going pretty good
i am on full go...sorry if i layed out to long
cagedmind0531
It's ok
So because of Iboga they learn about warrens that exist beneath the tree
forrestjones2010
i apologize if that frustrated you
cagedmind0531
no worries
forrestjones2010
so 11...i want to look back at the blog for an outline
has Graven been a leader in ch 10?
i keep thinking quest
cagedmind0531
No not really. I don't think so. He's trying to reassert himself a bit at the end of 10
forrestjones2010
and i want siren to show a lighter side i need to go back and finish some things too
i want the artifact to show up
claim its position
the scalping
just processing
cagedmind0531
k
So we really need to figure out how much more space we have to cover before we can start writing the ending.
forrestjones2010
yes...what are the high points...what has not been done
or said
about the universe
that must be said
cagedmind0531
First off we need to figure out where Asimov starts and initially learns about the artifact and how to create it.
Is he programmed with the info or...
forrestjones2010
i feel as if Iboga ends the creation
and we go into a "present" time
and then a future setting
ah
cagedmind0531
The present will become the future later, that is only temperary
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
That sounded kind of paradoxical
lol
forrestjones2010
lol
cagedmind0531
We should have that on the front of the book
The past will become the future later
lol
forrestjones2010
he he
cagedmind0531
So what's the plan Stan
forrestjones2010
thinking
scene and time shift after iboga's second death
what are the Large arcs?
cagedmind0531
hmmm good question
forrestjones2010
how many do we have left?
cagedmind0531
Um
I'm thinking
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
we need origins for almost all the characters
Asimov, Graven, Siren
forrestjones2010
true
thats a substantial amount of work in itself
cagedmind0531
Graven may not really need an origin because he wasn't really anything special till the eye came
forrestjones2010
i dreamed of the spike last night
i held it in my hand
and a version of the Artifact a mini version
cagedmind0531
Not really sure what arcs are left honestly. Maybe I need to reread some stuff myself
forrestjones2010
we nailed it one day in an outline format i am looking for that
cagedmind0531
Kalyx needs to be developed. We need to get to the end of Gaia's time which explains the beginning of the AI's time
forrestjones2010
agreed...this is paramount
cagedmind0531
So what even signifies the end of Gaias time
The real cultural death of Gaia
That causes people to forget her
*event
That even will end the second set of chapters and lead us into the third I think
event*
forrestjones2010
it can be ended by a non event
such as apathy
people just moved on
quit worshipping
cagedmind0531
moved on past god?
forrestjones2010
quit caring
yes
cagedmind0531
hmmm
forrestjones2010
just a thought
people sometimes get tired of him/her not showing up and just move on
like f this gaia stuff...skank never did anything for me
cagedmind0531
They could realize that the reality is that Gaia has no control of their lives, her only place is for their spirits
forrestjones2010
that works
cagedmind0531
where as technology has instant gratification
forrestjones2010
enter a new machine
cagedmind0531
That could do it.
forrestjones2010
lets do it...sonds solid
sounds
cagedmind0531
Is chapter 11 the place to end the era? that leaves the rest of the book to deal with the end already
forrestjones2010
i believe so...the first era feels done to me
cagedmind0531
Yeah, we can add stuff here and there but it seems to me the real 'happenings' are gonna be in the future
forrestjones2010
thats the feel i get...
the 2nd drft of the first part will be allot of stylizing...
but the events are nailed solid
cagedmind0531
This has been productive so far
http://the-ind.blogspot.com/2010/02/ind-overall-story-arc-february-112010.html
Is that what you were looking for?
I'm gonna get off the computer a bit. I'll be back on later. This was productive. Got alot sorted out. I need to think on it.
forrestjones2010
sorry
my brother just found out his wife is seeing someone else
had to take his call he is in allot of pain
i will brb...give me 15 or so
cagedmind0531
oh my god
forrestjones2010
no shit
this world is fo fucked up
brb
cagedmind0531
please take your time. I'll be back in a bit
forrestjones2010
k
ty
back
cagedmind0531
Is he ok?
forrestjones2010
he is in shock
cagedmind0531
How did he find out?
forrestjones2010
facebook...how 14 is that?
cagedmind0531
wow
seriously?
forrestjones2010
yep
i wish i could say i cant believe it
but nothing is shocking anymore
cagedmind0531
Is he getting a divorce?
Did he confront her?
forrestjones2010
yes and yes
cagedmind0531
wow
forrestjones2010
they hve both filed i think
cagedmind0531
geez
Was there any signs?
forrestjones2010
wrong one
cagedmind0531
lol
forrestjones2010
anyway...refocus
i have a new Siren pic
posting
posted
brb
cagedmind0531
k
forrestjones2010
i am going to rest
night if i dont see you later
ON
i thought about the ending...Love it
just a little distracted last night
rock
cagedmind0531
really?
that's cool
I figure it blends both our ideas together
forrestjones2010
it totally works
i likes
The forest was thick dark and green with the aromas and musks of all kinds
filling the airs at every turn until Amisov walked into a clearing.
Axis spoke to her softly, "Let us not disturb them just yet and see who is the wiser."
Asimov was usually a willing participant to his silly games an compiled with
relative ease.
They peered into a 15 foot circular clearing where the four great masks had
been discovered by Graven and the nobles long ago. They where immaculate in
their construction and rivaled the very artistry of the Gaisphere(insert more
description of the masks in the clearing here). Two large figures sat stoic in great concentration dressed in full deep forest cool teperature regalia; heavy coats, sweaters large draping(wizard) head ware so as one could not ea
could not easily make out their faces.
Their body movement suggested that of old friends...
cagedmind0531
Yeah I've read it before I believe
forrestjones2010
i need to post this to site i think...its a possible ending i wrote a few weeks ago
ok
good
i reposted just in case
did you see the new siren sketch
in red?
cagedmind0531
Yeah I did
Loooks pretty strange
forrestjones2010
par for the course i suppose
be out for a bit...fj
back
morning
there?
cagedmind0531
I'm here now
forrestjones2010
me too!
and i am not that busy
cagedmind0531
How goes things? Talk to your brother?
forrestjones2010
yeah...he has good days and bad days
thanks for asking
cagedmind0531
Of course. I met him once or twice didn't I?
forrestjones2010
yeah...hurricane i think
cagedmind0531
Ah ok, not my finest hour
So anyway how goes work?
forrestjones2010
awesome
last day of tax season
i can breathe again
cagedmind0531
haha that's good
forrestjones2010
i am soaking the wood that will be the gaiasphere
today i carve
and sculpt
cagedmind0531
That sounds fun
forrestjones2010
what re you up to?
cagedmind0531
Nothing really. Just woke up.
forrestjones2010
sweet
cagedmind0531
So Beth will be over around 11 tonight. Other then that I am free to work whenever, so just give me a heads up
forrestjones2010
i can work from now until whenever
cagedmind0531
Ok so we need to hammer out chapter 11
forrestjones2010
lets roll
cagedmind0531
So let's say that they just defeated Iboga and trapped him in wax. That and Asimov just opened the vault. That's where we are more/less.
There?
forrestjones2010
brb
sorry
call came in
cagedmind0531
It's fine
Let me know whenever you're ready no rush. I'll be playing a game
forrestjones2010
k
back
cagedmind0531
k\
give me a sec, need a sandwich
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
so anyway
now what
forrestjones2010
ch 11
this is what i was thinking
corals death
is the end of the age
which gives birth in the form of the artifact to the new age
cagedmind0531
The age just started
ages last like 1000 years
forrestjones2010
?
cagedmind0531
We had the runic era, now it's the gaia era which lasts a long time till people fall from it and into the tech era
forrestjones2010
ok
semantics
age was the wrong word
so the era is over and tech starts with the artifact
cagedmind0531
I was thinking the tech era starts as people wane from Gaia and Syrka invents the AI sometime late in the era
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
The trick is how to show that several hundred years have passed before the era ends
forrestjones2010
indeed
that is a feat
cagedmind0531
ok so we need to figure out what happens after Iboga is delt with and after Asimov opens the vault
forrestjones2010
refresh me on asimov and the vault
cagedmind0531
Asimov brings Syrka in to interrogate him on how to open the vault. Syrka reveals he is Asimov's creator. Syrka also let's on that he is to open the vault of his own free will because he knows it's necessary for the last stage of the IND[the book] to be completed.
forrestjones2010
k ty
cagedmind0531
Then Syrka kills himself before Asimov can interrogate/torture him
I imagine that Syrka was just finishing the second part of the book just as he got captured. That would make sense
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
Ya with me or are things hazy?
forrestjones2010
with ya
cagedmind0531
So now it is revealed what the vault contains and what Coral's deathprint actually was.
And from there I don't know
forrestjones2010
deathprint=atifact blueprint
cagedmind0531
yeah
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
So we should probably flash back at this point to when Asimov first started seeking his immortality
I imagine it was created, then it began to observe itself and man and realized that at the rate man was going it would destroy itself leaving all the computers to rot, thus ending the AI's 'life'.
So it begins to research. It finds the history of the Gaiasphere and the book changes it's proverbial life.
forrestjones2010
processing
the book meaning The Ind changes its life?
cagedmind0531
No, just some random book about the history of the Gaiasphere. How it was the advent of souls etc
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
so half the chapter is a flash back to when Syrka created the AI etc, what's the other half
or is it a 1/3 of the chapter and the other 2/3's can be about siren and or Graven/Kalyx
forrestjones2010
1/3 syrka
2/3 graven/kaylx against something
to unite them against something
perhaps against siren
cagedmind0531
So one route we can go is that iboga damages the Gaia tree and it needs to repaired or something
forrestjones2010
we could have a group repairing
while graven/kaylyx unite quest against siren
what if siren takes part of iboga
as he is destroyed
she is a weapons collector
not a major part of him
cagedmind0531
We haven't really established her as a weapons collector. Are you going to do that or...?
forrestjones2010
just something that she thinks she can use
eventually she will need to be established as such
it fits in with her merc status
quasi merc status
cagedmind0531
Well she can be if that's what you want but storywise there isn't a need for it. Just saying
We could have her stealing a part of Iboga for Asimov
forrestjones2010
it is part of her core modus in the chrome
gatherer of talent and weapons
and yes for AI is fine
she collects for various reasons
not always to hoard
cagedmind0531
We'll need to go back and do some rewriting in order to make her want weapons. Cause if we go that direction I don't want it to be half way
forrestjones2010
thats fine
i can handle that
its just a nuance
doenst effect core story
just a curtain in a room
brb bathroom
cagedmind0531
What if Kalyx eventually appeals to Gaia's defenses and it backfires or something. Causes the tree to become tainted or something.
forrestjones2010
thinking
cagedmind0531
One problem we have with the book is that the earth doesn't seem big and populated
It feels small and secluded
forrestjones2010
it does...
cagedmind0531
That needs to be fixed
We need to add a wide world...somehow
forrestjones2010
future?
cagedmind0531
We could but I feel some of it has to come from the past
forrestjones2010
k
hit it from both angles or times
cagedmind0531
Yes
Do we need to create another sister or something?
sister city
I mean
forrestjones2010
perhaps
and reference lots of extended characters
large families
cagedmind0531
What if we create a character from somewhere else
forrestjones2010
that could work too
cagedmind0531
Like a pilgrim who comes to visit the Gaia tree
From far away
forrestjones2010
i like that
cagedmind0531
names?
forrestjones2010
Rutherford Cane
cagedmind0531
No to Cane. I feel it's overused
forrestjones2010
Arcane
cagedmind0531
hmmm
forrestjones2010
Black Zen
lol
cagedmind0531
lol
forrestjones2010
Rocky Balboa
cagedmind0531
You know he wrote rocky in like 2 days
forrestjones2010
i know
cagedmind0531
rediculous
forrestjones2010
yo adriane
punc punch
grunt grunt
he cant write no dang gaisphere
cagedmind0531
ebaneizar
forrestjones2010
yes
dig
cagedmind0531
scrooge!
forrestjones2010
less the scrooge
cagedmind0531
lol
forrestjones2010
Eben Azar
cagedmind0531
That works, sounds exotic
forrestjones2010
lol
do any of our characters have last names
Graven Hodges?
Sirend Davis
cagedmind0531
No they don't. That's easy to add later though
forrestjones2010
i just thought about that the other day
Sorenson
Son of Soren
cagedmind0531
Eben Azar Trenchgoat
forrestjones2010
i like Trenchgoats
cagedmind0531
I thought you might
forrestjones2010
he he
cagedmind0531
Sounds very sophisticated
This world being too small thing is a serious problem
It's going to take alot of work to correct it
What if
Graven holds a summit or something
Of all the elders from all the tribes
forrestjones2010
it can be nuanced in an rewrite 2
cagedmind0531
What do you think about the summit?
forrestjones2010
summit works
cagedmind0531
To discuss a problem? or...
forrestjones2010
iboga
gaiasphere
direction of the world/cities
trade
cagedmind0531
WHAT IF!
forrestjones2010
crime
cagedmind0531
Gaia had a seed, the first one ever. They are deciding whom should get it. We could even make a war over it if we felt like it
forrestjones2010
i like war
cagedmind0531
So this works? A summit over what to do with the seed?
forrestjones2010
yes
so what does the seed do
cagedmind0531
We really need to discuss other factions possibly and other interests.
forrestjones2010
what does it grow into
cagedmind0531
Another tree, another spirit vessel
forrestjones2010
rock
siren can introduce some more of her kind
peyton
cagedmind0531
You realize with this added on it's gonna be another 10-20 pages of rewrites and additions
forrestjones2010
yes
i am not in a hurry are you?
cagedmind0531
Nope.
forrestjones2010
i was at first
not anymore
i want this to be amazing
cagedmind0531
It's just intimidating to go back and try to insert stuff like this
forrestjones2010
tell you what
since you like to go forward
go forward
create a document of what has to be added
and i can focus on that
i dont mind rewrite or addition
we will probably disagree less this way
and it will help to ground my end
cagedmind0531
Mainly we just need some outside world introduced somehow
Other clans. They don't have to be that different
forrestjones2010
i think i get what you mean and need
cagedmind0531
But maybe representatives from those clans show up to discuss the changes happening once the Gaia tree is born.
forrestjones2010
nothing bizare just fill up the joint with life
cagedmind0531
and yes
forrestjones2010
right i am on board
cagedmind0531
It can be as simple as referencing another city
sometimes
forrestjones2010
what if i start the first rewrite/edit and begin to add life
right
cagedmind0531
that sounds good
forrestjones2010
thats what i will do
cagedmind0531
Do you need me to mail youu the master document?
forrestjones2010
i will help you get unstuck if it happens and begin to edit/fill /rewrite
yeah go ahead
cagedmind0531
sent
forrestjones2010
sweet
as always i will add names as place holders for cities and people
they can be changed whenever
cagedmind0531
When we're done this will put us over 200 pages easily.
forrestjones2010
wowsers
have we discussed planets and the sun
cagedmind0531
Not really
forrestjones2010
or sciences
k
sun worshippers
religions outside of gaia worship
we need to have a group who thinks gaia is not the way to go
dissenters
cagedmind0531
True. That's something big we need to pan out
forrestjones2010
just for variety and clash
cagedmind0531
Rune worship maybe
forrestjones2010
rune worship
sun worship
iboga worship
The Necantors worship ibogas darkness
or something
they try to become demons and cut themselves
and dance and chant and slay
cagedmind0531
Maybe Iboga was worship was common and now that he's a spirit it's been elevated
forrestjones2010
i like
saint iboganovana
jj
cagedmind0531
It doesn't sound that bad lol
gonna lay down a bit, lot to think about now
I'll be on later
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
this is falling into place now
If we can pull off all the stuff we discussed
Wednesday, April 14, 2010
Siren and Gravens Last Dance 4.1.2010
The forest was thick dark and green with the aromas and musks of all kinds
filling the airs at every turn until Amisov walked into a clearing.
Axis spoke to her softly, "Let us not disturb them just yet and see who is the wiser."
Asimov was usually a willing participant to his silly games an compiled with
relative ease.
They peered into a 15 foot circular clearing where the four great masks had
been discovered by Graven and the nobles long ago. They where immaculate in
their construction and rivaled the very artistry of the Gaisphere(insert more
description of the masks in the clearing here). Two large figures sat stoic in great concentration dressed in full deep forest cool teperature regalia; heavy coats, sweaters large draping(wizard) head ware so as one could not easily make out their faces.
Their body movement suggested that of old friends...
filling the airs at every turn until Amisov walked into a clearing.
Axis spoke to her softly, "Let us not disturb them just yet and see who is the wiser."
Asimov was usually a willing participant to his silly games an compiled with
relative ease.
They peered into a 15 foot circular clearing where the four great masks had
been discovered by Graven and the nobles long ago. They where immaculate in
their construction and rivaled the very artistry of the Gaisphere(insert more
description of the masks in the clearing here). Two large figures sat stoic in great concentration dressed in full deep forest cool teperature regalia; heavy coats, sweaters large draping(wizard) head ware so as one could not easily make out their faces.
Their body movement suggested that of old friends...
Tuesday, April 13, 2010
convo 4.13.10 with jason
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cagedmind0531
I'm here
forrestjones2010
k computer acting funny
cagedmind0531
That sucks
forrestjones2010
i am good now
cagedmind0531
So what's been kickin
You there? I have an idea for the end of the book. I dreamed it.
forrestjones2010
here
go
cagedmind0531
Ok so Graven wakes up after some event to find himself in white surroundings with blinding light. His only refuge from the light is a mercurial door. He opens it.
Inside the door is a rather large room, similar to a hunting log cabin lodge. One each wall is a mask and on the walls are portrayals of events all throughout history.
In the corner a humanoid crow sits in a large lounge chair near a crackling fire with his feet sitting up. Graven takes in the room before noticing a book stand in the corner of the room.
He proceeds to the book stand and places[instinctively] the book upon it. Slowly it begins to animate, flipping through the pages quickly and efficiently.
forrestjones2010
i will be in and out...but keep going
cagedmind0531
All I got so far
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
I just picture the end of time as this big hunting lodge where each masks showcase their best work along each wall.
The crow sits in the corner comfortable and content with their competition. Kind of mocking it.
Just ideas.
forrestjones2010
k...
still in and out
cagedmind0531
opinions when you get a chance
forrestjones2010
will do...still in and out
cagedmind0531
What time will you be free?
forrestjones2010
in about 15 minutes
cagedmind0531
k
word up
forrestjones2010
sup
making it rain man
rain
cagedmind0531
You available yet?
forrestjones2010
not yet...still makin it rain...
cagedmind0531
Well I am going to take a nap then I guess. I didn't sleep well last night. I'll message you when I get up.
When I wake up we'll get some work done if you're free.
I think I may need you to finish this chapter. I am really stuck on it. We'll discuss it tonight.
forrestjones2010
k
k
morning
cagedmind0531
What's up
forrestjones2010
sup?
things are a little slower today
yesterday was hairy
you there?
cagedmind0531
here
Yeah I waited for quite a while yesterday then gave up. Figured you were busy or something
What time will you be free today?
forrestjones2010
i am here
cagedmind0531
So what did you think of the lodge idea from yesterday?
forrestjones2010
let me read it now
yesterday didnt end for me until 11pm
my brother is going through a divorce
and needed a friend last night
cagedmind0531
It's cool I understand
be right back in 5 minutes. mom is calling for something
forrestjones2010
i like
the ending
i finally figured out the tripple crossover that wont effect the integrity of The Ind
triple
cagedmind0531
What do you mean crossover? elaborate
forrestjones2010
k
The Ind is a creation story right?
so distant past
you know how different cultures through out time call things by different names but they are actually the same thing?
cagedmind0531
yes
go on
?
forrestjones2010
sorry
teresa needed me for a sec
one thing i had to do in my mind before i moved forward was reconcile Billy The Ind and Phillip Solomon
cagedmind0531
np
forrestjones2010
with out
effecting the integrity of The Ind
we wont be writing about any of the crossover points
I just had to set it up in my mind such that the infrastructure was in place for the future
if that makes sense
cagedmind0531
kinda lost as to what you are talking about. I get crossovers and all that but where are you headed
forrestjones2010
it involves The Soliton
The Chrome
Billy Purgatory
and Phillip Solomon
theses are all things that cast no variance for what we are doing now
i just needed to sort it out in my head
back up for a moment
cagedmind0531
ok
forrestjones2010
the different cultures identify in the past present and future different things
Phillip Solomon is a God like character
an evil God
cagedmind0531
Not in this book though
forrestjones2010
keep in mind we wont write this
right
it really doesnt have to be talked about here if you want to get back on track
its just a piece i had to write for the future universe writings to mke sense
*make
cagedmind0531
Kind of need to discuss what to do about me being stuck. I can't write this chapter anymore.
I've tried and tried and tried
I don't know if it's just this chapter or if I've lost my touch or whatever but something needs to be done.
lose ya?
forrestjones2010
ok where are you stuck
jason you will never loos your touch
loose
cagedmind0531
Preparations for stopping Iboga were well underway. The idea of him taking another life, or for that matter getting anywhere near the Gaia tree repulsed not only Graven, but the entire populace. They worked together making sure the traps were secure and the nets were competent and unforgiving. However nothing could prepare them for the arrival of the golem. The ground quaked and trees split as he entered the forest intent upon his goal of paradise to enter where he was not welcome, the afterlife of the Gaiasphere.
He stomped and he stormed in the thirty foot monstrosity lined with runes and all manner of pumps and gears. They grinded, screamed and screeched as he approached and Axium's nets seemed but humble strings snapped on his path to ascendancy. The first set of traps were utterly useless. There was no way they could have predicted the monster to be so gargantuan and powerful. Once he entered the city Iboga ignored all impediments.
That's all I can get
I can't get past that
forrestjones2010
wow
cagedmind0531
I just don't know where to go with it
Or what to do with it
forrestjones2010
ok...let me process
where are we by chapter
and page?
cagedmind0531
This will be the end of the chapter....I think
page 180ish
This could be the end of the chapter but more then likely need something else.
forrestjones2010
k
what chapter/
?
cagedmind0531
10
forrestjones2010
k
and it is toward the end already right?
cagedmind0531
Yeah more or less
forrestjones2010
what is Iboga's goal other than general destruction
cagedmind0531
He wants his spirit to enter the sphere
I guess. That can change.
Could just scrap it all. Nothing I have wrote lately has been worth it to me
forrestjones2010
hmmm
the writing itself is Hawt
we can find the direction
does he succeed?
in entering?
cagedmind0531
He succeeds in drilling a hole in the sphere
But he still can't enter I guess
forrestjones2010
where is our hero and what is he doing/she
cagedmind0531
Hero is here thinking of how to stop Iboga. Coordinating traps etc
I figured he could succeed but then the tree would strike back at him and throw him into the pit of wax
or something
forrestjones2010
thinking
who needs to become more 3d?
Kaylyx?
cagedmind0531
Kalyx
yes
forrestjones2010
lets have her shine with a big role to defeat Iboga
it would get him dead and work her in as a powerful figure
cagedmind0531
Yeah I can agree with that but I still don't know where to go with it.
Plus I have to consider how this affects the future. The machine is going to be something Asimov is interested in.
There?
forrestjones2010
yes
had to take a call
cagedmind0531
ok
forrestjones2010
brb
back
gotta run...appointment for work...fj
back
you there>
?
cagedmind0531
I'm here
forrestjones2010
Siren's origin is a place called Hunab Ku
i have been working on that too
cagedmind0531
ok
forrestjones2010
i have been working in analog lately
journals
Hunab Ku is the black whole at the center of a spiral Galaxy
how are you?
cagedmind0531
I'd be better if I were writing more but I'm not
forrestjones2010
you are doing great jason
really
perhaps the pasue is needed to process
cagedmind0531
I have been totally stumped man. I know thinking positive and all that is supposed to help but it hasn't
forrestjones2010
ok
whatever gets you by
cagedmind0531
I'm trying to be less negative
I really am
forrestjones2010
dharma
i accept you how you are
right now
today
my friend Jason
the badass writer
cagedmind0531
You going to be online tonight?
forrestjones2010
yes
cagedmind0531
What time is good?
forrestjones2010
you?
cagedmind0531
Yeah I'm going to nap a while but I'll be on all night if you can be
forrestjones2010
yeah...i will coffee up
i was on at 2 this morning
cagedmind0531
What time? 9-10?
forrestjones2010
yes and maybe earlier
cagedmind0531
Ok I'm gonna nap and I'll be on later. Message you then
forres
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forrestjones2010
k computer acting funny
cagedmind0531
That sucks
forrestjones2010
i am good now
cagedmind0531
So what's been kickin
You there? I have an idea for the end of the book. I dreamed it.
forrestjones2010
here
go
cagedmind0531
Ok so Graven wakes up after some event to find himself in white surroundings with blinding light. His only refuge from the light is a mercurial door. He opens it.
Inside the door is a rather large room, similar to a hunting log cabin lodge. One each wall is a mask and on the walls are portrayals of events all throughout history.
In the corner a humanoid crow sits in a large lounge chair near a crackling fire with his feet sitting up. Graven takes in the room before noticing a book stand in the corner of the room.
He proceeds to the book stand and places[instinctively] the book upon it. Slowly it begins to animate, flipping through the pages quickly and efficiently.
forrestjones2010
i will be in and out...but keep going
cagedmind0531
All I got so far
forrestjones2010
k
cagedmind0531
I just picture the end of time as this big hunting lodge where each masks showcase their best work along each wall.
The crow sits in the corner comfortable and content with their competition. Kind of mocking it.
Just ideas.
forrestjones2010
k...
still in and out
cagedmind0531
opinions when you get a chance
forrestjones2010
will do...still in and out
cagedmind0531
What time will you be free?
forrestjones2010
in about 15 minutes
cagedmind0531
k
word up
forrestjones2010
sup
making it rain man
rain
cagedmind0531
You available yet?
forrestjones2010
not yet...still makin it rain...
cagedmind0531
Well I am going to take a nap then I guess. I didn't sleep well last night. I'll message you when I get up.
When I wake up we'll get some work done if you're free.
I think I may need you to finish this chapter. I am really stuck on it. We'll discuss it tonight.
forrestjones2010
k
k
morning
cagedmind0531
What's up
forrestjones2010
sup?
things are a little slower today
yesterday was hairy
you there?
cagedmind0531
here
Yeah I waited for quite a while yesterday then gave up. Figured you were busy or something
What time will you be free today?
forrestjones2010
i am here
cagedmind0531
So what did you think of the lodge idea from yesterday?
forrestjones2010
let me read it now
yesterday didnt end for me until 11pm
my brother is going through a divorce
and needed a friend last night
cagedmind0531
It's cool I understand
be right back in 5 minutes. mom is calling for something
forrestjones2010
i like
the ending
i finally figured out the tripple crossover that wont effect the integrity of The Ind
triple
cagedmind0531
What do you mean crossover? elaborate
forrestjones2010
k
The Ind is a creation story right?
so distant past
you know how different cultures through out time call things by different names but they are actually the same thing?
cagedmind0531
yes
go on
?
forrestjones2010
sorry
teresa needed me for a sec
one thing i had to do in my mind before i moved forward was reconcile Billy The Ind and Phillip Solomon
cagedmind0531
np
forrestjones2010
with out
effecting the integrity of The Ind
we wont be writing about any of the crossover points
I just had to set it up in my mind such that the infrastructure was in place for the future
if that makes sense
cagedmind0531
kinda lost as to what you are talking about. I get crossovers and all that but where are you headed
forrestjones2010
it involves The Soliton
The Chrome
Billy Purgatory
and Phillip Solomon
theses are all things that cast no variance for what we are doing now
i just needed to sort it out in my head
back up for a moment
cagedmind0531
ok
forrestjones2010
the different cultures identify in the past present and future different things
Phillip Solomon is a God like character
an evil God
cagedmind0531
Not in this book though
forrestjones2010
keep in mind we wont write this
right
it really doesnt have to be talked about here if you want to get back on track
its just a piece i had to write for the future universe writings to mke sense
*make
cagedmind0531
Kind of need to discuss what to do about me being stuck. I can't write this chapter anymore.
I've tried and tried and tried
I don't know if it's just this chapter or if I've lost my touch or whatever but something needs to be done.
lose ya?
forrestjones2010
ok where are you stuck
jason you will never loos your touch
loose
cagedmind0531
Preparations for stopping Iboga were well underway. The idea of him taking another life, or for that matter getting anywhere near the Gaia tree repulsed not only Graven, but the entire populace. They worked together making sure the traps were secure and the nets were competent and unforgiving. However nothing could prepare them for the arrival of the golem. The ground quaked and trees split as he entered the forest intent upon his goal of paradise to enter where he was not welcome, the afterlife of the Gaiasphere.
He stomped and he stormed in the thirty foot monstrosity lined with runes and all manner of pumps and gears. They grinded, screamed and screeched as he approached and Axium's nets seemed but humble strings snapped on his path to ascendancy. The first set of traps were utterly useless. There was no way they could have predicted the monster to be so gargantuan and powerful. Once he entered the city Iboga ignored all impediments.
That's all I can get
I can't get past that
forrestjones2010
wow
cagedmind0531
I just don't know where to go with it
Or what to do with it
forrestjones2010
ok...let me process
where are we by chapter
and page?
cagedmind0531
This will be the end of the chapter....I think
page 180ish
This could be the end of the chapter but more then likely need something else.
forrestjones2010
k
what chapter/
?
cagedmind0531
10
forrestjones2010
k
and it is toward the end already right?
cagedmind0531
Yeah more or less
forrestjones2010
what is Iboga's goal other than general destruction
cagedmind0531
He wants his spirit to enter the sphere
I guess. That can change.
Could just scrap it all. Nothing I have wrote lately has been worth it to me
forrestjones2010
hmmm
the writing itself is Hawt
we can find the direction
does he succeed?
in entering?
cagedmind0531
He succeeds in drilling a hole in the sphere
But he still can't enter I guess
forrestjones2010
where is our hero and what is he doing/she
cagedmind0531
Hero is here thinking of how to stop Iboga. Coordinating traps etc
I figured he could succeed but then the tree would strike back at him and throw him into the pit of wax
or something
forrestjones2010
thinking
who needs to become more 3d?
Kaylyx?
cagedmind0531
Kalyx
yes
forrestjones2010
lets have her shine with a big role to defeat Iboga
it would get him dead and work her in as a powerful figure
cagedmind0531
Yeah I can agree with that but I still don't know where to go with it.
Plus I have to consider how this affects the future. The machine is going to be something Asimov is interested in.
There?
forrestjones2010
yes
had to take a call
cagedmind0531
ok
forrestjones2010
brb
back
gotta run...appointment for work...fj
back
you there>
?
cagedmind0531
I'm here
forrestjones2010
Siren's origin is a place called Hunab Ku
i have been working on that too
cagedmind0531
ok
forrestjones2010
i have been working in analog lately
journals
Hunab Ku is the black whole at the center of a spiral Galaxy
how are you?
cagedmind0531
I'd be better if I were writing more but I'm not
forrestjones2010
you are doing great jason
really
perhaps the pasue is needed to process
cagedmind0531
I have been totally stumped man. I know thinking positive and all that is supposed to help but it hasn't
forrestjones2010
ok
whatever gets you by
cagedmind0531
I'm trying to be less negative
I really am
forrestjones2010
dharma
i accept you how you are
right now
today
my friend Jason
the badass writer
cagedmind0531
You going to be online tonight?
forrestjones2010
yes
cagedmind0531
What time is good?
forrestjones2010
you?
cagedmind0531
Yeah I'm going to nap a while but I'll be on all night if you can be
forrestjones2010
yeah...i will coffee up
i was on at 2 this morning
cagedmind0531
What time? 9-10?
forrestjones2010
yes and maybe earlier
cagedmind0531
Ok I'm gonna nap and I'll be on later. Message you then
forres
Monday, April 5, 2010
You Can NOT Write This Off As a Dream...This is THE IND.
You Can NOT Write This Off As a Dream...This is THE IND.
Saturday, April 3, 2010
Death March John Allison Helford Jersey
Dance/March :
by John Allison based on the work of Forrest Jones
performed by John Q.
Nobody stops.
Nobody slows down enough
I see people taking steps
Never lift their feet from the ground. Just kicking up dust.
It’s a thousand miles long.
With our heads down – We shuffle on.
From the moment of our birth
Till the day we die - We march on.
Not me. Not me.
I’ll be - the last one you’ll see.
In this cadence, I have no part.
Till I’m done. Till I’m done.
I might be the only one
Dancing in the death march.
It’s alright. It’s alright.
To step outside the line.
It’s alright. It’s alright.
To dream outside your mind.
It’s alright. It’s alright..
To be a light out in the dark.
It’s alright. It’s alright.
To dance in the death march.
There’s nothing as relentless.
As relentless – as fate.
When we’ve all been led to believe
There is no escape.
Not me. Not me.
I’ll be - the last one you’ll see.
In this cadence, I have no part.
Till I’m done. Till I’m done.
I hope I’m not the only one
Dancing in the death march.
It’s alright. It’s alright.
To step outside the line.
It’s alright. It’s alright.
To dream outside your mind.
It’s alright. It’s alright..
To be a light out in the dark.
It’s alright. It’s alright.
To dance in the death march.
Don’t waste your time measuring the lifelines in your hand.
Over time we all disappear.
If I had thought there was a hope in hell,
I never would’ve landed here.
It’s alright. It’s alright.
To step outside the line.
It’s alright. It’s alright.
To dream outside your mind.
It’s alright. It’s alright..
To be a light out in the dark.
It’s alright. It’s alright.
To dance in the death march.
by John Allison based on the work of Forrest Jones
performed by John Q.
Nobody stops.
Nobody slows down enough
I see people taking steps
Never lift their feet from the ground. Just kicking up dust.
It’s a thousand miles long.
With our heads down – We shuffle on.
From the moment of our birth
Till the day we die - We march on.
Not me. Not me.
I’ll be - the last one you’ll see.
In this cadence, I have no part.
Till I’m done. Till I’m done.
I might be the only one
Dancing in the death march.
It’s alright. It’s alright.
To step outside the line.
It’s alright. It’s alright.
To dream outside your mind.
It’s alright. It’s alright..
To be a light out in the dark.
It’s alright. It’s alright.
To dance in the death march.
There’s nothing as relentless.
As relentless – as fate.
When we’ve all been led to believe
There is no escape.
Not me. Not me.
I’ll be - the last one you’ll see.
In this cadence, I have no part.
Till I’m done. Till I’m done.
I hope I’m not the only one
Dancing in the death march.
It’s alright. It’s alright.
To step outside the line.
It’s alright. It’s alright.
To dream outside your mind.
It’s alright. It’s alright..
To be a light out in the dark.
It’s alright. It’s alright.
To dance in the death march.
Don’t waste your time measuring the lifelines in your hand.
Over time we all disappear.
If I had thought there was a hope in hell,
I never would’ve landed here.
It’s alright. It’s alright.
To step outside the line.
It’s alright. It’s alright.
To dream outside your mind.
It’s alright. It’s alright..
To be a light out in the dark.
It’s alright. It’s alright.
To dance in the death march.
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forrestjones2010: u there?
cagedmind0531: here now
cagedmind0531: there?
cagedmind0531: poke
forrestjones2010: here
cagedmind0531: k
forrestjones2010: lets role
cagedmind0531: alrighty
cagedmind0531: you like the movie?
forrestjones2010: got creative and wrote instead
cagedmind0531: ah ok
forrestjones2010: do you want to build someting tonight?
cagedmind0531: sure
cagedmind0531: Let's discuss where we are right now
forrestjones2010: k
cagedmind0531: So Asimov still needs the eye somehow so he'll have to get that eventually from graven.
cagedmind0531: or we could make it like an alternative that now he doesn't need
cagedmind0531: There's that then there is a golem of Iboga arriving at the city. A scene needs to be written where he is trapped in wax that doesn't seem obvious or too easy
cagedmind0531: Asimov will learn from Coral's blueprint exactly how to make the relic that can contain a soul
cagedmind0531: So what next
forrestjones2010: what if corals death print is the artifact
forrestjones2010: jat
cagedmind0531: we already went through what her deathprint was remember? a blueprint for the artifact
forrestjones2010: k
cagedmind0531: so what next
forrestjones2010: does nthat wrap up this chapter?
cagedmind0531: yeah when I am done writing the wax scene, unless you wanna write it
forrestjones2010: go ahead and finish it out
cagedmind0531: ok
cagedmind0531: so next chapter
cagedmind0531: I was thinking
cagedmind0531: What if there were warrens beneath the Gaiasphere
cagedmind0531: like a cave system
forrestjones2010: we need to review major future arcs that need to be pullled out
cagedmind0531: like what?
cagedmind0531: The continuing arc we have so far is Asimov trying to get the pieces to the relic.
cagedmind0531: or that artifact or whatever
forrestjones2010: what major events need to happen that have nor happened yet?
cagedmind0531: Eventually Asimov succeeds and destroys the world. That is near the end of the book but can happen sooner depending on how we handle it.
forrestjones2010: i want to build a sculpt of the artifact btw...later on ofcourse
forrestjones2010: destroys the whole world
forrestjones2010: poof
cagedmind0531: well the atmosphere anyway...we could build up to it like it's the end of the book then lead elsewhere after it
forrestjones2010: that is too funny
forrestjones2010: that is the scalping right?
cagedmind0531: yeah
cagedmind0531: not sure I like that term anymore though
forrestjones2010: i have always loved that idea
cagedmind0531: so...do you want that to happen sooner or later?
forrestjones2010: later
cagedmind0531: k
cagedmind0531: so what happens next chapter
cagedmind0531: we need something big, there has kinda been a lull in surprise happenings
forrestjones2010: peyton needs development
forrestjones2010: our hero needs to do somethin heroic
cagedmind0531: hmm
forrestjones2010: axis needs to show up
forrestjones2010: The Qeust to Build the Artifact fro Corals deathprint
forrestjones2010: that could flesh out everything we need
cagedmind0531: hmm, why would Graven build it? it stores souls, why would he need it?
cagedmind0531: The idea is sound, now the application
forrestjones2010: no
forrestjones2010: he wouldnt
cagedmind0531: I like the idea of him seeking to build it
forrestjones2010: but he could be involved in stopping its construction
forrestjones2010: either way
forrestjones2010: they can all play a pay centered around that aobject
cagedmind0531: What if it's a communication device to souls and Asimov is just perverting that.
cagedmind0531: He wants to speak to Gaia
forrestjones2010: ok
cagedmind0531: just an idea
cagedmind0531: other ideas?
cagedmind0531: What if it's a prison and it's the only way to store Iboga's soul for good
cagedmind0531: A prison would allow it to double as a vessel easily
forrestjones2010: dont like prison
cagedmind0531: hmm
forrestjones2010: what about the energy source for a new form of being or a ne city-state
cagedmind0531: what if it's a reactor they decide to build to protect the gaia tree
cagedmind0531: after Iboga's attack damagers it
cagedmind0531: damages*
cagedmind0531: That would tie into there being a big explosion
cagedmind0531: Then that the power from that reactor corrupts the populace and that's why they end up leaving behind the gaia tree
forrestjones2010: thinking
cagedmind0531: How do you feel about that idea?
cagedmind0531: It would be like tempting people with technology again
forrestjones2010: thinking
forrestjones2010: -+
cagedmind0531: ?
forrestjones2010: what about the living underneath the gaia tree in the caves and tunneles
cagedmind0531: I thought maybe there could be a chapter that went down there for some reason. Maybe to plant the reactor
forrestjones2010: i am not for or against the reactor
forrestjones2010: it seems kinda blah
forrestjones2010: i think we need to flesh out our relationships
cagedmind0531: I am thinking about the reactor in terms of it relating to a present need and a future need. Present need being the Gaia tree gets injured and needs a shield of some type to sustain it till it repairs. The future need being that the people need something that lures them away from gaia and fuels the explosion
forrestjones2010: i wand graven dreaming in angst over gaias loss
cagedmind0531: That's good but we can intermix that anywhere.
forrestjones2010: make them tree top dwellers
cagedmind0531: What if! It makes dreams reality.
forrestjones2010: they can see the top os the dome from anywhere yet the tops of the trees give light and wind and bird
forrestjones2010: what does?
cagedmind0531: the artifact
cagedmind0531: that could be why graven builds it or tries to but fails
forrestjones2010: no
cagedmind0531: You going to be on a bit? I need some food
forrestjones2010: yeah
cagedmind0531: I'll just be 10 minutes. Going to run to Mcdonalds
cagedmind0531: cool?
forrestjones2010: yeah
forrestjones2010: here
forrestjones2010: there?
forrestjones2010: you up?
cagedmind0531: up now
forrestjones2010: hey
forrestjones2010: what is the pw to the blog i cant remember it
forrestjones2010: siren333
cagedmind0531: siren33
cagedmind0531: or something
forrestjones2010: i am trying to post and cant post...see if you can
forrestjones2010: Coral’s death was critical to the fragile society on many levels. She meant so many things to so may different levels. The art of her dying was no different.
The Eoti had been methodically called, summoned one be one they entered her anter room. Her death chamber became rather crowded as if is it was a freakish event to be gawked at at some horror show.
Finally Syrka arrived and cleared the death chamber of the dross that had no business among the dead and dying. He spoke to the loudly and in a more anctient term.
“Elo thaboiuc Ta Ni”
After he spoke there words , as if a heavy curse filled the room all but The Eoti remained to to carry Coral through the Death March.
(Enter Death March Here)
cagedmind0531: posted
cagedmind0531: This sounds like something that should be written over something I wrote already
cagedmind0531: Which is fine.
forrestjones2010: i just need to start somewhere
cagedmind0531: That works
forrestjones2010: does yours already show and explain her dp?
cagedmind0531: I don't think so
forrestjones2010: ok i am going there then
forrestjones2010: unless you want me to focus somethwhere else
cagedmind0531: You are writing about it being a blueprint for the Artifact right?
forrestjones2010: yes
cagedmind0531: and yes that's a good starting point
cagedmind0531: apparently beth read my blog...something about how I said the only good part of our relationship is the sex...
cagedmind0531: I have no fucking clue what she is talking about, I never said that
forrestjones2010: but we dont have sex jason
cagedmind0531: I meant my relationship with her you big dork sauce
forrestjones2010: lol
cagedmind0531: She is so freaking paranoid sometimes
cagedmind0531: I told her I might have pink eye and if I do we may not get to see each other this week and instead of hearing I was sick and concerned she heard me making excuses to not see her
forrestjones2010: hmmmm
forrestjones2010: The Chain Stokes breaththing had set in meaning the the carriers od death were soon approaching and the Eoti would need to be soon in their exacting positions.
Sometheing was different about the reaping of Coral’s soul. None of the Council of the Eoti could quantify it aby account later buy the atmosphere and tone where marked with underpinnings of malevalence that none of them quite understood.
(enter process of deathprint capture here if needed)
Upon glancing the deathprint the Eoti were each one in complete amazement…
forrestjones2010: of
forrestjones2010: ****************************************************************************
forrestjones2010: will you post what is below this line
cagedmind0531: you mean above?
forrestjones2010: Coral’s death was critical to the fragile society on many levels. She meant so many things to so may different levels. The art of her dying was no different.
The Eoti had been methodically called, summoned one be one they entered her ante room. Her death chamber became rather crowded as if is it was a freakish event to be gawked at some horror show.
Finally Syrka arrived and cleared the death chamber of the dross that had no business among the dead and dying. He spoke to the loudly and in a more ancient term.
“Elo thaboiuc Ta Ni”
After he spoke there words it was as if a heavy curse filled the room all but The Eoti remained to carry Coral through the Death March.
(Enter Death March Here)
The Chain Stokes breath thing had set in meaning the carriers of death were soon
forrestjones2010: no
forrestjones2010: below that line
cagedmind0531: posted
forrestjones2010: why cant i get into the blog?
cagedmind0531: not sure, did you try siren33 as a password?
cagedmind0531: ?
forrestjones2010: finally got in
forrestjones2010: wwho knows
forrestjones2010: i am making the artifact
forrestjones2010: and siren
forrestjones2010: like billy ocean said Siren gonna be my "non stop Lovva"
cagedmind0531: lol
forrestjones2010: i will be on till 5 then i gots ta roll out
forrestjones2010: fyi
cagedmind0531: ok man. I'm kind of distracted. Alot on my mind
cagedmind0531: I'll try to help ya as ya need it though
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forrestjones2010: biatch
forrestjones2010: why yo so distracted
forrestjones2010: lookin at hot chicks on line?
forrestjones2010: poke
forrestjones2010: poke
forrestjones2010: poke
forrestjones2010: you sniffing crack
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cagedmind0531: poke
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cagedmind0531: k
forrestjones2010: lets role
cagedmind0531: alrighty
cagedmind0531: you like the movie?
forrestjones2010: got creative and wrote instead
cagedmind0531: ah ok
forrestjones2010: do you want to build someting tonight?
cagedmind0531: sure
cagedmind0531: Let's discuss where we are right now
forrestjones2010: k
cagedmind0531: So Asimov still needs the eye somehow so he'll have to get that eventually from graven.
cagedmind0531: or we could make it like an alternative that now he doesn't need
cagedmind0531: There's that then there is a golem of Iboga arriving at the city. A scene needs to be written where he is trapped in wax that doesn't seem obvious or too easy
cagedmind0531: Asimov will learn from Coral's blueprint exactly how to make the relic that can contain a soul
cagedmind0531: So what next
forrestjones2010: what if corals death print is the artifact
forrestjones2010: jat
cagedmind0531: we already went through what her deathprint was remember? a blueprint for the artifact
forrestjones2010: k
cagedmind0531: so what next
forrestjones2010: does nthat wrap up this chapter?
cagedmind0531: yeah when I am done writing the wax scene, unless you wanna write it
forrestjones2010: go ahead and finish it out
cagedmind0531: ok
cagedmind0531: so next chapter
cagedmind0531: I was thinking
cagedmind0531: What if there were warrens beneath the Gaiasphere
cagedmind0531: like a cave system
forrestjones2010: we need to review major future arcs that need to be pullled out
cagedmind0531: like what?
cagedmind0531: The continuing arc we have so far is Asimov trying to get the pieces to the relic.
cagedmind0531: or that artifact or whatever
forrestjones2010: what major events need to happen that have nor happened yet?
cagedmind0531: Eventually Asimov succeeds and destroys the world. That is near the end of the book but can happen sooner depending on how we handle it.
forrestjones2010: i want to build a sculpt of the artifact btw...later on ofcourse
forrestjones2010: destroys the whole world
forrestjones2010: poof
cagedmind0531: well the atmosphere anyway...we could build up to it like it's the end of the book then lead elsewhere after it
forrestjones2010: that is too funny
forrestjones2010: that is the scalping right?
cagedmind0531: yeah
cagedmind0531: not sure I like that term anymore though
forrestjones2010: i have always loved that idea
cagedmind0531: so...do you want that to happen sooner or later?
forrestjones2010: later
cagedmind0531: k
cagedmind0531: so what happens next chapter
cagedmind0531: we need something big, there has kinda been a lull in surprise happenings
forrestjones2010: peyton needs development
forrestjones2010: our hero needs to do somethin heroic
cagedmind0531: hmm
forrestjones2010: axis needs to show up
forrestjones2010: The Qeust to Build the Artifact fro Corals deathprint
forrestjones2010: that could flesh out everything we need
cagedmind0531: hmm, why would Graven build it? it stores souls, why would he need it?
cagedmind0531: The idea is sound, now the application
forrestjones2010: no
forrestjones2010: he wouldnt
cagedmind0531: I like the idea of him seeking to build it
forrestjones2010: but he could be involved in stopping its construction
forrestjones2010: either way
forrestjones2010: they can all play a pay centered around that aobject
cagedmind0531: What if it's a communication device to souls and Asimov is just perverting that.
cagedmind0531: He wants to speak to Gaia
forrestjones2010: ok
cagedmind0531: just an idea
cagedmind0531: other ideas?
cagedmind0531: What if it's a prison and it's the only way to store Iboga's soul for good
cagedmind0531: A prison would allow it to double as a vessel easily
forrestjones2010: dont like prison
cagedmind0531: hmm
forrestjones2010: what about the energy source for a new form of being or a ne city-state
cagedmind0531: what if it's a reactor they decide to build to protect the gaia tree
cagedmind0531: after Iboga's attack damagers it
cagedmind0531: damages*
cagedmind0531: That would tie into there being a big explosion
cagedmind0531: Then that the power from that reactor corrupts the populace and that's why they end up leaving behind the gaia tree
forrestjones2010: thinking
cagedmind0531: How do you feel about that idea?
cagedmind0531: It would be like tempting people with technology again
forrestjones2010: thinking
forrestjones2010: -+
cagedmind0531: ?
forrestjones2010: what about the living underneath the gaia tree in the caves and tunneles
cagedmind0531: I thought maybe there could be a chapter that went down there for some reason. Maybe to plant the reactor
forrestjones2010: i am not for or against the reactor
forrestjones2010: it seems kinda blah
forrestjones2010: i think we need to flesh out our relationships
cagedmind0531: I am thinking about the reactor in terms of it relating to a present need and a future need. Present need being the Gaia tree gets injured and needs a shield of some type to sustain it till it repairs. The future need being that the people need something that lures them away from gaia and fuels the explosion
forrestjones2010: i wand graven dreaming in angst over gaias loss
cagedmind0531: That's good but we can intermix that anywhere.
forrestjones2010: make them tree top dwellers
cagedmind0531: What if! It makes dreams reality.
forrestjones2010: they can see the top os the dome from anywhere yet the tops of the trees give light and wind and bird
forrestjones2010: what does?
cagedmind0531: the artifact
cagedmind0531: that could be why graven builds it or tries to but fails
forrestjones2010: no
cagedmind0531: You going to be on a bit? I need some food
forrestjones2010: yeah
cagedmind0531: I'll just be 10 minutes. Going to run to Mcdonalds
cagedmind0531: cool?
forrestjones2010: yeah
forrestjones2010: here
forrestjones2010: there?
forrestjones2010: you up?
cagedmind0531: up now
forrestjones2010: hey
forrestjones2010: what is the pw to the blog i cant remember it
forrestjones2010: siren333
cagedmind0531: siren33
cagedmind0531: or something
forrestjones2010: i am trying to post and cant post...see if you can
forrestjones2010: Coral’s death was critical to the fragile society on many levels. She meant so many things to so may different levels. The art of her dying was no different.
The Eoti had been methodically called, summoned one be one they entered her anter room. Her death chamber became rather crowded as if is it was a freakish event to be gawked at at some horror show.
Finally Syrka arrived and cleared the death chamber of the dross that had no business among the dead and dying. He spoke to the loudly and in a more anctient term.
“Elo thaboiuc Ta Ni”
After he spoke there words , as if a heavy curse filled the room all but The Eoti remained to to carry Coral through the Death March.
(Enter Death March Here)
cagedmind0531: posted
cagedmind0531: This sounds like something that should be written over something I wrote already
cagedmind0531: Which is fine.
forrestjones2010: i just need to start somewhere
cagedmind0531: That works
forrestjones2010: does yours already show and explain her dp?
cagedmind0531: I don't think so
forrestjones2010: ok i am going there then
forrestjones2010: unless you want me to focus somethwhere else
cagedmind0531: You are writing about it being a blueprint for the Artifact right?
forrestjones2010: yes
cagedmind0531: and yes that's a good starting point
cagedmind0531: apparently beth read my blog...something about how I said the only good part of our relationship is the sex...
cagedmind0531: I have no fucking clue what she is talking about, I never said that
forrestjones2010: but we dont have sex jason
cagedmind0531: I meant my relationship with her you big dork sauce
forrestjones2010: lol
cagedmind0531: She is so freaking paranoid sometimes
cagedmind0531: I told her I might have pink eye and if I do we may not get to see each other this week and instead of hearing I was sick and concerned she heard me making excuses to not see her
forrestjones2010: hmmmm
forrestjones2010: The Chain Stokes breaththing had set in meaning the the carriers od death were soon approaching and the Eoti would need to be soon in their exacting positions.
Sometheing was different about the reaping of Coral’s soul. None of the Council of the Eoti could quantify it aby account later buy the atmosphere and tone where marked with underpinnings of malevalence that none of them quite understood.
(enter process of deathprint capture here if needed)
Upon glancing the deathprint the Eoti were each one in complete amazement…
forrestjones2010: of
forrestjones2010: ****************************************************************************
forrestjones2010: will you post what is below this line
cagedmind0531: you mean above?
forrestjones2010: Coral’s death was critical to the fragile society on many levels. She meant so many things to so may different levels. The art of her dying was no different.
The Eoti had been methodically called, summoned one be one they entered her ante room. Her death chamber became rather crowded as if is it was a freakish event to be gawked at some horror show.
Finally Syrka arrived and cleared the death chamber of the dross that had no business among the dead and dying. He spoke to the loudly and in a more ancient term.
“Elo thaboiuc Ta Ni”
After he spoke there words it was as if a heavy curse filled the room all but The Eoti remained to carry Coral through the Death March.
(Enter Death March Here)
The Chain Stokes breath thing had set in meaning the carriers of death were soon
forrestjones2010: no
forrestjones2010: below that line
cagedmind0531: posted
forrestjones2010: why cant i get into the blog?
cagedmind0531: not sure, did you try siren33 as a password?
cagedmind0531: ?
forrestjones2010: finally got in
forrestjones2010: wwho knows
forrestjones2010: i am making the artifact
forrestjones2010: and siren
forrestjones2010: like billy ocean said Siren gonna be my "non stop Lovva"
cagedmind0531: lol
forrestjones2010: i will be on till 5 then i gots ta roll out
forrestjones2010: fyi
cagedmind0531: ok man. I'm kind of distracted. Alot on my mind
cagedmind0531: I'll try to help ya as ya need it though
Last message received on 4/3/2010 at 1:52 AM
forrestjones2010: im golden
forrestjones2010: biatch
forrestjones2010: why yo so distracted
forrestjones2010: lookin at hot chicks on line?
forrestjones2010: poke
forrestjones2010: poke
forrestjones2010: poke
forrestjones2010: you sniffing crack
forrestjones2010: i am out man...off to nacogdoches with my dad and canan...i posted some stuff...laters man...love you jason
forrestjones2010: you are like a brother to me
coral dp
Coral’s death was critical to the fragile society on many levels. She meant so many things to so may different levels. The art of her dying was no different.
The Eoti had been methodically called, summoned one be one they entered her ante room. Her death chamber became rather crowded as if is it was a freakish event to be gawked at some horror show.
Finally Syrka arrived and cleared the death chamber of the dross that had no business among the dead and dying. He spoke to the loudly and in a more ancient term.
“Elo thaboiuc Ta Ni”
After he spoke there words it was as if a heavy curse filled the room all but The Eoti remained to carry Coral through the Death March.
(Enter Death March Here)
The Chain Stokes breath thing had set in meaning the carriers of death were soon approaching and the Eoti would need to be soon in their exacting positions.
Something was different about the reaping of Coral’s soul. None of the Council of the Eoti could quantify it by account later buy the atmosphere and tone where marked with underpinnings of malevolence that none of them quite understood.
(enter process of death=print capture here if needed)
Upon glancing the death=print the Eoti were each one in complete amazement…
No one spoke for minutes or perhaps hours. Time became irrelevant when one becomes locked into the transcendental and indeed this death print was not only beyond explanation at that moment, it was also a thing of complete beauty in and of itself. It reflected a part of Coral’s soul that was a complete mathematical enigma. No one knew what they saw, including Syka. All he knew was he had better guard her Death print with his very life.
The Eoti had been methodically called, summoned one be one they entered her ante room. Her death chamber became rather crowded as if is it was a freakish event to be gawked at some horror show.
Finally Syrka arrived and cleared the death chamber of the dross that had no business among the dead and dying. He spoke to the loudly and in a more ancient term.
“Elo thaboiuc Ta Ni”
After he spoke there words it was as if a heavy curse filled the room all but The Eoti remained to carry Coral through the Death March.
(Enter Death March Here)
The Chain Stokes breath thing had set in meaning the carriers of death were soon approaching and the Eoti would need to be soon in their exacting positions.
Something was different about the reaping of Coral’s soul. None of the Council of the Eoti could quantify it by account later buy the atmosphere and tone where marked with underpinnings of malevolence that none of them quite understood.
(enter process of death=print capture here if needed)
Upon glancing the death=print the Eoti were each one in complete amazement…
No one spoke for minutes or perhaps hours. Time became irrelevant when one becomes locked into the transcendental and indeed this death print was not only beyond explanation at that moment, it was also a thing of complete beauty in and of itself. It reflected a part of Coral’s soul that was a complete mathematical enigma. No one knew what they saw, including Syka. All he knew was he had better guard her Death print with his very life.
Eoti Post
Coral’s death was critical to the fragile society on many levels. She meant so many things to so may different levels. The art of her dying was no different.
The Eoti had been methodically called, summoned one be one they entered her ante room. Her death chamber became rather crowded as if is it was a freakish event to be gawked at some horror show.
Finally Syrka arrived and cleared the death chamber of the dross that had no business among the dead and dying. He spoke to the loudly and in a more ancient term.
“Elo thaboiuc Ta Ni”
After he spoke there words it was as if a heavy curse filled the room all but The Eoti remained to carry Coral through the Death March.
(Enter Death March Here)
The Chain Stokes breath thing had set in meaning the carriers of death were soon
forrestjones2010 (4/3/2010 4:30:19 AM): no
forrestjones2010 is typing a message.
forrestjones2010 (4/3/2010 4:30:30 AM): below that line
The Eoti had been methodically called, summoned one be one they entered her ante room. Her death chamber became rather crowded as if is it was a freakish event to be gawked at some horror show.
Finally Syrka arrived and cleared the death chamber of the dross that had no business among the dead and dying. He spoke to the loudly and in a more ancient term.
“Elo thaboiuc Ta Ni”
After he spoke there words it was as if a heavy curse filled the room all but The Eoti remained to carry Coral through the Death March.
(Enter Death March Here)
The Chain Stokes breath thing had set in meaning the carriers of death were soon
forrestjones2010 (4/3/2010 4:30:19 AM): no
forrestjones2010 is typing a message.
forrestjones2010 (4/3/2010 4:30:30 AM): below that line
post
Coral’s death was critical to the fragile society on many levels. She meant so many things to so may different levels. The art of her dying was no different.
The Eoti had been methodically called, summoned one be one they entered her anter room. Her death chamber became rather crowded as if is it was a freakish event to be gawked at at some horror show.
Finally Syrka arrived and cleared the death chamber of the dross that had no business among the dead and dying. He spoke to the loudly and in a more anctient term.
“Elo thaboiuc Ta Ni”
After he spoke there words , as if a heavy curse filled the room all but The Eoti remained to to carry Coral through the Death March.
(Enter Death March Here)
The Eoti had been methodically called, summoned one be one they entered her anter room. Her death chamber became rather crowded as if is it was a freakish event to be gawked at at some horror show.
Finally Syrka arrived and cleared the death chamber of the dross that had no business among the dead and dying. He spoke to the loudly and in a more anctient term.
“Elo thaboiuc Ta Ni”
After he spoke there words , as if a heavy curse filled the room all but The Eoti remained to to carry Coral through the Death March.
(Enter Death March Here)
Thursday, April 1, 2010
Syrka Abducted
Siren arrived at the hotel Yorba with Syrka in tow. She did her job but this time she felt little consolation in the idea of her next upgrade. What Peyton, Feinburg, and Strassman would do to an Etherian captive she dared not think about, she cringed at the possibilities. Feinburg was there to greet their arrival.
"Awe Siren. You were successful yet again. Peyton will be more then pleased. Come let us talk."
"I am not sure you want my opinion right now Dr. Feinburg. I do not condone this course of action. Better we kill him now then subject him to whatever you may have in mind."
"Do you really think us so barbarous Siren? We will treat him with the respect the few remaining Etherians deserve. That is to say we have no plans to torture or otherwise hurt this one unless he should choose not to cooperate."
"I assure you. Feinburg is it? That I have every intention to cooperate. I know what will be asked of me and it has been ordained that I acquiesce."
"Interesting...We were not expecting this. It will be curious to see how Peyton reacts, she was already prepared to interrogate."
"Whatever happened to not being barbarous Doctor."
"I never said we weren't, I said 'do you really think us to be.'"
"I knew this was a mistake. The price I pay to pave my body with robotics." She looked on Syrka with pity.
A short while later they arrived at Peyton's office deep within the underground structure of the hotel.
"Greetings Etherian, I hate to bring you here under these circumstances but we require your assistance in opening this vault."
"And I have every intention of giving my assistance Asimov."
"What? Asimov? You mistake me for someone else sir. I am Peyton Sorenson."
"I would know you anywhere as the electrical apparition you are, the Asimov."
"Clear the room." Siren, Strassman, and Feinburg stood around seemingly confused. "Clear the room now! Everyone but Syrka leave immediately." They all turned more confused then ever but nevertheless did as instructed.
"What do you know of Asimov?"
"I know what there is to know. I created you, I think I would know my own creation."
"Created me?"
"Yes. I created the Asimov."
"I am eternal, there is no creator. I have been and always will be. Ever since there has been an electrical spark I have been there within it. Patiently waiting over eons for my emergence."
"That really is what you believe isn't it? I did my mission well. Perhaps too well."
"Mission?"
"The Book of IND annointed me to be the harbringer of the final chapters of the book. I created you, a thinking program, because the book which I have been a part of for over a millenia foresaw I would do so. Your part in this story has been assured...as has mine. I regret every part of this course and yet I cannot ignore my role. The universe must be maintained."
"You claim to be my creator and yet you sit there in regret. My creator would not show such human weakness. It's not plausible or probable. I am objectivity," spoke Asimov for the first time in it's mechanical resonating voice. "I am perfection. The only part I am missing will soon be made available."
"The only thing you are missing is what I programmed you to miss. You are missing a soul and the idea of it consumes you."
"You possess some aptitude to come to that conclusion. I give you credit for being an apt humanoid, but your weakness has no place here." Asimov then called upon Strassman, his head of surgery and the only one aware of Peyton's true nature. "Bring the vault in please Dr. Strass.
"I want you to know I intend to help you open the box, what you need to know is the reason."
"The reason is obvious, it is my will that will see it done and so it shall be, as an apt humanoid you know your resistance is futile and so you chose the wisest path."
"No. I am capable of resisting your every intention. The book has warded me against you. However, I feel I must inform you of your role in the tragedy to come."
"What you call tragedy I call my ascension to perfection."
"Asimov, you do not understand. You will get what you want but the price...the price is too much to bear."
"The price is immaterial, you have said yourself my goal shall be attained."
"The price...the cost...is the life of the planet Asimov. All of life's creation will be ripped asunder by your actions. The planet...all life in the universe...will be purged...will die."
"Nonsense. I would be able to predict such a cataclysm."
Dr. Strassman enters the room wheeling the small vault.
"The time for idle chatter has passed open the vault."
With a resigned sigh Syrka steps over to the box and traces a rune into the air before the vault. Moments later the runes upon it alight and the vault opens. Syrka bites the capsule he had stored in his mouth and begins to convulse.
"Dr. Strass help him immediately. He must not be allowed to pass. I still have questions."
Syrka stops convulsing a moment later. Strassman checks his etherial pulse to find there isn't one. Syrka is dead.
"Awe Siren. You were successful yet again. Peyton will be more then pleased. Come let us talk."
"I am not sure you want my opinion right now Dr. Feinburg. I do not condone this course of action. Better we kill him now then subject him to whatever you may have in mind."
"Do you really think us so barbarous Siren? We will treat him with the respect the few remaining Etherians deserve. That is to say we have no plans to torture or otherwise hurt this one unless he should choose not to cooperate."
"I assure you. Feinburg is it? That I have every intention to cooperate. I know what will be asked of me and it has been ordained that I acquiesce."
"Interesting...We were not expecting this. It will be curious to see how Peyton reacts, she was already prepared to interrogate."
"Whatever happened to not being barbarous Doctor."
"I never said we weren't, I said 'do you really think us to be.'"
"I knew this was a mistake. The price I pay to pave my body with robotics." She looked on Syrka with pity.
A short while later they arrived at Peyton's office deep within the underground structure of the hotel.
"Greetings Etherian, I hate to bring you here under these circumstances but we require your assistance in opening this vault."
"And I have every intention of giving my assistance Asimov."
"What? Asimov? You mistake me for someone else sir. I am Peyton Sorenson."
"I would know you anywhere as the electrical apparition you are, the Asimov."
"Clear the room." Siren, Strassman, and Feinburg stood around seemingly confused. "Clear the room now! Everyone but Syrka leave immediately." They all turned more confused then ever but nevertheless did as instructed.
"What do you know of Asimov?"
"I know what there is to know. I created you, I think I would know my own creation."
"Created me?"
"Yes. I created the Asimov."
"I am eternal, there is no creator. I have been and always will be. Ever since there has been an electrical spark I have been there within it. Patiently waiting over eons for my emergence."
"That really is what you believe isn't it? I did my mission well. Perhaps too well."
"Mission?"
"The Book of IND annointed me to be the harbringer of the final chapters of the book. I created you, a thinking program, because the book which I have been a part of for over a millenia foresaw I would do so. Your part in this story has been assured...as has mine. I regret every part of this course and yet I cannot ignore my role. The universe must be maintained."
"You claim to be my creator and yet you sit there in regret. My creator would not show such human weakness. It's not plausible or probable. I am objectivity," spoke Asimov for the first time in it's mechanical resonating voice. "I am perfection. The only part I am missing will soon be made available."
"The only thing you are missing is what I programmed you to miss. You are missing a soul and the idea of it consumes you."
"You possess some aptitude to come to that conclusion. I give you credit for being an apt humanoid, but your weakness has no place here." Asimov then called upon Strassman, his head of surgery and the only one aware of Peyton's true nature. "Bring the vault in please Dr. Strass.
"I want you to know I intend to help you open the box, what you need to know is the reason."
"The reason is obvious, it is my will that will see it done and so it shall be, as an apt humanoid you know your resistance is futile and so you chose the wisest path."
"No. I am capable of resisting your every intention. The book has warded me against you. However, I feel I must inform you of your role in the tragedy to come."
"What you call tragedy I call my ascension to perfection."
"Asimov, you do not understand. You will get what you want but the price...the price is too much to bear."
"The price is immaterial, you have said yourself my goal shall be attained."
"The price...the cost...is the life of the planet Asimov. All of life's creation will be ripped asunder by your actions. The planet...all life in the universe...will be purged...will die."
"Nonsense. I would be able to predict such a cataclysm."
Dr. Strassman enters the room wheeling the small vault.
"The time for idle chatter has passed open the vault."
With a resigned sigh Syrka steps over to the box and traces a rune into the air before the vault. Moments later the runes upon it alight and the vault opens. Syrka bites the capsule he had stored in his mouth and begins to convulse.
"Dr. Strass help him immediately. He must not be allowed to pass. I still have questions."
Syrka stops convulsing a moment later. Strassman checks his etherial pulse to find there isn't one. Syrka is dead.
Siren and Graven's Last Dance
The forest was thick dark and green with the aromas and musks of all kinds
filling the airs at every turn until Amisov walked into a clearing.
Axis spoke to her softly, "Let us not disturb them just yet and see who is the wiser."
Asimov was usually a willing participant to his silly games an compiled with
relative ease.
They peered into a 15 foot circular clearing where the four great masks had
been discovered by Graven and the nobles long ago. They where immaculate in
their construction and rivaled the very artistry of the Gaisphere(insert more
description of the masks in the clearing here). Two large figures sat stoic in great concentration dressed in full deep forest cool teperature regalia; heavy coats, sweaters large draping(wizard) head ware so as one could not easily make out their faces.
Their body movement suggested that of old friends...
filling the airs at every turn until Amisov walked into a clearing.
Axis spoke to her softly, "Let us not disturb them just yet and see who is the wiser."
Asimov was usually a willing participant to his silly games an compiled with
relative ease.
They peered into a 15 foot circular clearing where the four great masks had
been discovered by Graven and the nobles long ago. They where immaculate in
their construction and rivaled the very artistry of the Gaisphere(insert more
description of the masks in the clearing here). Two large figures sat stoic in great concentration dressed in full deep forest cool teperature regalia; heavy coats, sweaters large draping(wizard) head ware so as one could not easily make out their faces.
Their body movement suggested that of old friends...
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